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One Nine and Sixteen - the Attic


The Attic


Sewing machine, long idle, gathered dust
     in this old attic of dear grandma's home.
So dark, a lighted candle is a must;
     here in this place, I feel so all alone.

I come across sweet Grandma's wedding gown
     inside a wooden trunk, with photos too.
They look so young...I feel a tear roll down
     to see the happiness that they once knew.

The war years seemed like only yesterday
     to Gramps, who left this earth three years ago.
And here I find his medals on display...
     the combat gear he wore is stacked below.

And now they are together...Grandma passed
     five days ago...was buried near their park.
Now I, my precious memories, hold fast...
     the candle sputtered, spent, and all was dark.


Sandra M. Haight

~4th Place~
Contest: One Nine and Sixteen
Sponsor: Viv Wigley
Judged: 09/02/2018

Rules: Write a sixteen line poem, using the three lines below.

Line 1    'Sewing machine, long idle, gathered dust'
Line 9    'The war years seemed like only yesterday'
Line 16  'The candle sputtered, spent, and all was dark'
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Date: 5/3/2018 10:38:00 PM
Lovely! Congrats, Sandra!
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/4/2018 8:59:00 AM
Thank you so much, Kim! Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/3/2018 1:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your great win, Sandra. Great poem.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/3/2018 1:08:00 PM
Thank you, Subimal! Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/2/2018 8:57:00 PM
Great story, Sandra. Many congrats on your win. Elaine
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/3/2018 1:08:00 PM
Thank you so much, Elaine! I appreciate your visit and uplifting comments. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/2/2018 3:09:00 PM
This should have been up there at the top. These are all so well written. It must have been a terrible job to judge them. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/3/2018 1:07:00 PM
Thank you very much, Joyce, for your visit and very supportive comment and congratulations. Yes, there were many lovely poems. Love and Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/2/2018 12:02:00 PM
Sandra, congratulations on this wonderful heartfelt verse. I love that everyone has a different image of the 3 sentences.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/3/2018 1:06:00 PM
Thank you, Eve. Yes, it is amazing how many lovely poems were created! Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/2/2018 11:56:00 AM
Many congratulations on your win in the contest Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/3/2018 1:05:00 PM
Thank you, Jan. Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/2/2018 10:23:00 AM
Sandra this perfect. Congratulations on your win. Thoroughly enjoyed.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/3/2018 1:05:00 PM
Thank you very much, Susan. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/2/2018 6:09:00 AM
Back with well deserved congrats, Sandra.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/3/2018 1:04:00 PM
Thank you so much, Line. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 4/16/2018 9:29:00 PM
Very nicely penned Sandra...Best wishes
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Sandra Haight
Date: 4/18/2018 4:54:00 PM
Thank you very much, Joseph, for your visit and uplifting comments. Sandra
Date: 4/15/2018 10:18:00 AM
Wow, Sandra. You were truly inspired for this beauty. Amazing imagery.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:25:00 PM
Thank you so much, Line! Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 4/15/2018 9:55:00 AM
Such wonderful but memories Sandra and the picture is perfect for your poem. I too went with a similar idea of the attic as Viv's lines give rise to such a melancholy poems. good luck with the contest- hugs jan xx
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Sandra Haight
Date: 4/16/2018 4:25:00 PM
Thank, Jan. Yes, those lines invite melancholy for sure. Thanks for your visit and uplifting comments. Hugs, Sandra
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