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One Last Hug

A flower amid many in a garden full of roses You reign gallantly wearing exotic fiery red, Knowing the sunny days will dry your petals If no one soon picks you for a festive bouquet, Your devoted lover sings praises of your stance Adoring your splendor in verses quite grand Promising his words will make you immortal, But he hasn't visited since the last encounter, You fought nasty winds and the sensual moths Protecting the virtues of your fragrant charm Guarding ardent scent reserved just for him To whiff a kiss when he caresses your leaves, You defied moon's advancing wicked glance Never falling for the urge of a spurious dance For you saw the lust of their flirting vile eyes Choosing to await for your true-love to arrive, Having saved parting breath for one last hug Sad look of disbelief has you gravely undone Wishing you could fold and instantly curl up As you see him chasing a budding yellow-rose. February 23, 2018 Placed first in End 2018 standard contest by Brian Strand Placed 3rd in Best free verse contest by John Hamilton

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Date: 5/15/2023 9:01:00 AM
Thus withstanding all adversities and flirtations, the flower has been waiting for a hug from her lover. Unfortunately he is chasing a yellow flower ! The unexpected turns in love can be so shattering ! Quite beautifully written dear Vijay !
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Date: 12/18/2018 7:45:00 PM
Hi Vijay, This is such a wonderful write my friend. I can understand the feelings of this rose. She gives of her lustre to one. Love can be so cruel, sometimes though, one can be misunderstood. This is such a beautiful write Vijay. You always manage to bring out the emotion in me. I was lost within your words. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 3/3/2018 1:31:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Vijay. Well done.
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Date: 3/1/2018 7:45:00 PM
Returning with congratulations Vijay, on your excellent win with your beautiful poem of poignant love..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2018 5:34:00 AM
Thank you Susan.
Date: 2/27/2018 9:49:00 AM
Very imaginative use of metaphor and imagery, congrats Vijay on another win!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/27/2018 4:52:00 PM
Thank you John.
Date: 2/26/2018 2:41:00 AM
Using the symbol of love in this way shows us clearly how cruel love can be. So beautifully crafted Vijay.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/26/2018 5:38:00 AM
Many thanks Jean..appreciate your visit and kind words.
Date: 2/25/2018 9:44:00 PM
I'm applauding, your free is wonderful and I loved it - really I just fell in love and have deep respect for the crafting of this poem. The metaphors and imagery were fresh and enthralling. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/26/2018 5:38:00 AM
Thank you CayCay..always delighted by your visit and lovely comments.
Date: 2/25/2018 8:54:00 AM
A beautiful poem Vijay. I liked your creative ending, as in life, love is rarely returned the way we wish.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/25/2018 11:49:00 AM
Thank you James..appreciate your thoughts.
Date: 2/24/2018 6:21:00 PM
Love can be so harsh, yet we all end up surrendering to it. A lovely poem Vijay! : )
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/25/2018 5:51:00 AM
Thank you Connie...appreciate your thoughts.
Date: 2/24/2018 5:58:00 PM
Beautiful but sad Vijay... I miss my mom too...
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Date: 2/25/2018 5:51:00 AM
Thank you Pashang.
Date: 2/24/2018 7:43:00 AM
Creatively written to show the longing for love and then loss to another. Excellent detail, well done, Vijay :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2018 2:17:00 PM
Thank you Heidi..always appreciate your kind words.
Date: 2/24/2018 5:51:00 AM
Oh shame, after all that effort she went through, he does that. Unforgivable!! Vijay you have certainly allowed free reign to your imagination, so good, I really enjoyed this....Maria
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2018 6:56:00 AM
Appreciate your kind words Maria..many thanks.
Date: 2/23/2018 8:45:00 PM
Vijay, a sadly beautiful poem of the lovely red rose's tender heart being broken by that yellow rose bud chasing cad.. great use of metaphor in your enchanting and captivating write. Your first and last stanzas are gorgeous..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2018 5:39:00 AM
Thank you Susan..appreciate your kind words.
Date: 2/23/2018 7:47:00 PM
Oh my you ended it with him chasing after a budding rose instead of the one waiting for a hug! Sad one, Vijay. Filled with love's longing.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2018 5:38:00 AM
Thank you Andrea..appreciate your thoughts.
Date: 2/23/2018 7:22:00 PM
Lovely, poignant poem movingly conveying the theme of heartbreak, Vijay! Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2018 5:37:00 AM
Thanks you Janice..appreciate your kind words.
Date: 2/23/2018 6:16:00 PM
Beautiful but sad finish.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2018 5:36:00 AM
Thank you Richard.
Date: 2/23/2018 12:43:00 PM
Horrific conclusion of a fantastic prelude! Marvelous my friend, Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:54:00 PM
Thank you Demetrios..appreciate your kind words.
Date: 2/23/2018 12:20:00 PM
Simplt beautiful Vijay..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:53:00 PM
Thank you Silent One.
Date: 2/23/2018 11:55:00 AM
I enjoyed this metaphorical poem, Vijay. What a pity she reserved her beauty for somebody who had eyes for another! ~ Regards // paul
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:53:00 PM
Such is life! Many thanks Paul..appreciate your comments.
Date: 2/23/2018 10:31:00 AM
Hi Vijay, You've penned such a beautiful and romantic piece. I enjoyed it from start to finish. Well done:-) Alexis
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:52:00 PM
Thank you Alexis..appreciate your comments.
Date: 2/23/2018 9:15:00 AM
Really enjoyed your beautifully written poem Vijay, you are so talented. :))
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:51:00 PM
Appreciate your kind words..many thanks Roy.
Date: 2/23/2018 7:58:00 AM
So romantic Vijay and an accurate portrait of a fickle lover, well done !!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:50:00 PM
Thank you Mike--appreciate your thoughts.
Date: 2/23/2018 7:11:00 AM
- A beautiful and sensitive poem, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:50:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise for your kind words.
Date: 2/23/2018 7:02:00 AM
A beautiful poem, Vijay ...The last stanza I enjoyed much ...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:50:00 PM
Thank you Probir..appreciate your thoughts.
Date: 2/23/2018 6:53:00 AM
Wow... This is so beautiful... Poor red rose... Great imagery in this cute poem... I loved it...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/23/2018 4:49:00 PM
Thank you Supraja..appreciate your kind words.
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