One Cloud

over the moon 
way up high 
only one 
in the sky 
wonder'd why 
pass'd me by 
stoned my face 
a tilted sigh 

it was early in the morning 
when dawn began to rise 
drifting by way up high 
this cloud had caught my eyes 
the lone one in the sky 
cover'd and pass'd the moon 
never saw anymore 
until the time struck afternoon

moonhaiku

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Valsa George

Date: 9/14/2022 9:21:00 PM

Looks rather simple, but not that easy ....! Really enjoyed your poem Charlie and feel that I must try this !

Bill Baker

Date: 8/31/2022 8:27:00 AM

Enjoyed your cloud poem, Charlie. I love watching the clouds come and go and all the forms I can see in my imagination. Have a great day! Bill

Anisha Dutta

Date: 8/27/2022 8:21:00 PM

COOL I like the pattern very much. Sure to try. Have a Good Day.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/27/2022 7:49:00 AM

I enjoyed seeing your example, Charlie. We can create any rhyming pattern we want, right? This will be fun to try.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/3/2022 3:34:00 PM

I was just noticing a few words did not rhyme with any other, but this will be fun to try to rhyme every word somehow!

Charles Messina
Date: 8/27/2022 11:38:00 AM

Hi Andrea, yes, you can rhyme as you like! Thank you.

Jenna Logan

Date: 8/25/2022 3:49:00 AM

I'll have to give your new form a try. Nice to see you writing.

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/24/2022 6:03:00 PM

One cloud can make all the difference in the world on a hot summers August day, by 10 degrees. Charlie-New-Ku Poetry, challenging and unique! Great example! ~I Am Anaya

Charles Messina
Date: 8/24/2022 7:40:00 PM

May it rest above me (lol) and you! Thank you, Anaya. Much appreciated! ~Charlie

Panagiota Romios

Date: 8/24/2022 10:37:00 AM

Hey, Charles! I, too love dawn. A cool poem with great imagery! Unique, not piles of descriptive words! I get bored silly. You have the right poetic touch for me! I will try to read you more often.)) You have pages and pages of poems like I do. No need to write everyday.poets can look at our older poetry, don’t you think? Be your best! Hugs, Panagiota xxx

Charles Messina
Date: 8/24/2022 7:49:00 PM

Hey Pangie! Yeah, I've been on and off writing for some time now. So happy my poetry touches you in the right ways...awesome to hear! I always try my best when I do anything...my father always told me "If you're going to do something- do it right! Great to hear you have recovered nicely. Hugs Charlie xoxo