Once Upon a Forest Walk

The forest is cool, inviting.  I look for small wildflowers in lush grasses growing beneath the trees.  Sunlight streams in shafts
and there is birdsong, birdsong and delicate ferns on gentle banks.

Soon, I see a pathway that winds beside a clear stream.  The roots
from the trees reach toward the water etching deep ruts .
Large rocks decorate the edges -mark the curves that beckon
beckon me to follow on.

A large puddle appears, blocking the path. I take off my shoes and paddle through enjoying the squishy mud.

Suddenly, a bear - I STOP, 
watch it foraging for berries.  With caution,
 I back, silently away to let it follow the terrain
 onward to its cave and hibernation.

Something sparkles on the ground - I stoop- pick it up.
 It is a long key with a open circled end. I put it in my pocket
thinking it will make an interesting ornament.

At the end of the path, I find a rustic cottage with
 high garden gates, banks of rhododendrons. 
A secluded hideaway.
There is neatness, order to the whole scene.
 smoke rises from a chimney 
into clouds overhead.

I pull out the key. It sparkles temptingly.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 5/31/2021 7:10:00 AM
Lovely poem. You had me at the title. Beautiful ~
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Date: 7/31/2013 4:58:00 AM
Hi Suz the journey you took my mind down was one of suspense and tranquility.I wished this journey never ended.I liked this one from you much.
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Date: 7/8/2013 8:13:00 PM
Leaving us in suspense. Good ploy. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 7/8/2013 3:44:00 PM
an awesome fantasy poem... congrats :-) love LINDA
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Date: 7/8/2013 5:28:00 AM
Hi SuZ most enjoyable poem congrats on your win ty for entering Shadow x smiles
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Date: 6/27/2013 10:10:00 AM
Nice piece with an element of surprise.I followed you all the way on this nature trail.
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Date: 6/27/2013 3:08:00 AM
Enchanting and pure fairytale..I love it...Maybe next time ypu tell us if the key was tempting enough tto open the cottage door and reveal what you found..Maybe part two ? :).you re a great storyteller sweet lady. I love your post-Charma
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Date: 6/26/2013 8:23:00 AM
great write.gives peace.wonderful!.gives peace great!
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Date: 6/23/2013 10:01:00 AM
nice write. I enjoyed your trip to the forest even though I am a city person...very expressive with great imagery
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Date: 6/22/2013 6:29:00 PM
very cute ;}
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Date: 6/21/2013 7:56:00 PM
I felt like I was in that forest, its so descriptive gives a great visual feeling ,,,lovely write suz..really enjoyed!!!
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Date: 6/21/2013 1:12:00 PM
Love it, a nice little adventure!
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Date: 6/21/2013 12:11:00 PM
Your descriptions are wonderful. You painted a scene with words that I can see.
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Date: 6/21/2013 11:41:00 AM
Surprise ending..Sara
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Date: 6/21/2013 9:14:00 AM
for some reason this poem had put me at ease, such a lovely write, enjoyed your write XOXO SKAT
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Date: 6/21/2013 12:21:00 AM
Don't do it, Goldilocks! Great write, SuZ. There are many elements in your excellent descriptive poem of one I have been composing in my mind on a similar theme. Have a great weekend... David
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Date: 6/20/2013 10:06:00 PM
wow,I love where your imagination took you. I gotta try this one and then remember to put it in the contest. haha!!!
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