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Once She Was

. Racing towards a distant horizon I watch as hope fades within the desolate shadows of my bleak surroundings Damp air wafts heavily, silently... its aroma kindling thoughts of shared rainy Sundays and wet kisses in the park When once more thunderstorms converge as dark clouds drape ominous vistas in shades of midday despair Saturated angry heavens unleash drowning sorrow midst the endless deluge now battering this place Tear splashed puddles again overflow, reflecting the loneliness felt as chilled droplets drench me Yet still I run, hopelessly seeking those sunny days and blue skies I knew damn well would be gone... once she was

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 4/3/2018 3:41:00 AM

I can relate to this and your poem touches me. Many wishes, Kai

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/2/2017 2:52:00 PM

I feel 'you' here...Am moved.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/25/2017 4:17:00 PM

Wow Chris, you sure know how to end a poem with impact! I enjoyed this melancholy piece! : )

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/15/2017 10:04:00 AM

Hi Chris, sad to read your sad poetry, though it's very beautiful, missing your happier ones, hope everything is well with you:)

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/10/2017 10:33:00 PM

Hi Chris, I don't know how I missed this well written piece. Although you have penned a sad piece, it was such a delight to see a glimmer of hope on the horizon. Congratulations on getting the poem of day. It was well deserved. PS. Welcome back my friend:-) Alexis

Gayle Rodd

Date: 10/10/2017 5:38:00 AM

Wow. So many beautiful words in this. I bet you could write a smashin' novel!

Carole Duet

Date: 10/9/2017 11:00:00 PM

Sadness so well expressed leaves me with sorrow and yet, admiration in my heart, Chris. Congrats on being on the Best New Poems list.

Dean Wood

Date: 10/9/2017 8:56:00 AM

Chris, I am so glad to read some of your poetry again. This one is sad and so well expressed. When you can evoke these feelings in your reader, you are doing something right. Glad to see you again.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 10/9/2017 8:24:00 AM

Hello Chris, i lkie to walk in the rain. I like the drizzle, I like to walk in it. I like the feel of the rain on my skin. But when it pours I rather be indoors. have a nice day my friend.

Maria Williams

Date: 10/8/2017 11:27:00 PM

Back to say Congratulations Chris on POTD. Well done....Maria

Agnes Krampe

Date: 10/8/2017 8:30:00 PM

Congrats on your POTD, Chris - I did not get onto Soup until this evening, and am glad to have read this before ending my day.

Carol B.

Date: 10/8/2017 7:42:00 PM

Chris, Congratulations on receiving POTD! Sad poem but beautifully written. Happy to see you here.

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 10/8/2017 5:27:00 PM

Congratulations, Chris!

John Lawless

Date: 10/8/2017 12:48:00 PM

oh the pangs of unrequited love. sharply written Chris

Lin Lane

Date: 10/8/2017 12:03:00 PM

The sadness in your write makes me melancholy for you, Chris. I miss your sunny 'good morning' poetry. Please be well.

Kudzai Mhangwa

Date: 10/8/2017 11:46:00 AM

Nice poem and well done Chris!

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 10/8/2017 11:23:00 AM

Lovely write. Congrats on POTD. :) Sunita

Charlie Smith

Date: 10/8/2017 8:53:00 AM

So sad, hope it's fiction, so glad you're back, congratulations for POTD honors...

Tim Smith

Date: 10/8/2017 7:58:00 AM

The sunny days will return...great to see you posting

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/8/2017 7:31:00 AM

- A deep touching poem, Chris - Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/8/2017 7:30:00 AM

How lovely to be greeted by your words this morning Chris, however sad they be. So beatifully penned my friend, warm wishes your way dear xomo

Darren White

Date: 10/8/2017 7:29:00 AM

PotD my dear friend, I love it :D

Maria Williams

Date: 10/8/2017 2:36:00 AM

Lovely to see you back Chris. I sincerely hope this beautiful sad poem is not a reflection of your own feelings though? Welcome back...Maria

John Hamilton

Date: 10/7/2017 1:15:00 PM

This is soo good Chris, has that Bill Withers feel to it, ain't no sunshine when she's gone....and she's always gone too long...anytime she goes away. Loved this melancholy write, nice to see you posting hope you're doing well!

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/7/2017 10:23:00 AM

So good to read your thoughts again ... tho' this offering is tinged in such sadness, Chris. Even still, this is a splendid poem, expressed w/an adroit capable pen. Stellar write, my dear friend. Love and peace always.