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I'm not sure if one would define this writing as a shape poem also known as concrete. 

 

It's written so each block of the body of the work lines up perfectly. It has somewhat of a visual appeal. I've written between 50-100 poems in this visual style.

 

Can a poet compose poetry like music -like paintings -like a sketching with out affecting your poetry whatsoever.

The poem is exactly what you wanted to write. It's the cake the rest hopefully a delicious frosting.

 

there was a man a small man -a little man -a tiny man a small little tiny man who found a-tiny-small-little-something he pulled on it -and realized it had give he pulled -this stretchy-little-small-tiny thing and it kept stretching this was when the small man - who was a flimflam man after all realized he had a workable-fraud realized he had found something big -really-big it was more than a stretchy band it was a movement one he’d sstretchh beyond one’s expectations you could recognize him -by his large *mouth - and by his *tiny little hands *optional you may fill in the word *filthy before mouth or before tiny or both as you please -please armand~

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Date: 10/5/2023 10:07:00 AM
- "big -really-big it was more than a stretchy band it was a movement one he’d sstretchh beyond one’s expectations " ... expectations of life begin with the tiny little man, Maurice - Great written ... nice to see you back :) - hugs
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Date: 10/5/2023 9:32:00 AM
Tiny flimflam? Why not? Interesting style Maurice
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Date: 10/5/2023 8:40:00 AM
An unexpected surprise and something quite different from you, Armand. Glad to see you back. Your "man" here reminds me of many politicians.
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/5/2023 10:22:00 AM
Besides the unusual style & this is my least favorite poem of all my work. However I line up sentences to last letters. It could be 1st line of a stanza to the 4th line and the second to the third. I’ve written over 350 poems in this physical form many that line up from beginning to end.
Date: 10/5/2023 7:34:00 AM
oh my gosh, I had no idea where you were taking this one, but knowing you, I was certain it would go somewhere clever. The word, "filthy" and a plethora of others, certainly would be fitting before his mouth. The moron reminds me of a T-Rex... little hands, big mouth and a monster! It's great to see you here!
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Date: 10/5/2023 7:23:00 AM
Oh my Maurice. I wasn't expecting that new creation. Well done :)
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