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On the Train

We ride the train at night. Store front signs flash neon onto our faces through the window. Red, green, blue in words we don’t know. Four foreigners crowded in with a hundred faces. They speak in a language we can only catch a few pieces of. We get stern looks from disgusted fellow travelers each time we speak. We travel in silence. But I know what they’re thinking. They don’t need to say it. I can see it in their anger. “You’d think if they are going to be stationed here, they’d learn to speak our language.” In our arrogance We think everyone loves us We are their saviors

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Date: 3/22/2024 4:18:00 PM
How true, Jerry. powerful Haibun, my friend. Bill
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Date: 3/21/2024 4:44:00 AM
Hello Jerry, What a stirring poem. Your words danced with emotions and your imagery a canvas of introspection, urging us to confront shadows and embrace light. Jerry, these are soulful verses. Blessings, Daniel
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Jerry Brotherton
Date: 3/21/2024 5:28:00 PM
Thank you Daniel. I always appreciate your wonderful comments.
Date: 3/20/2024 3:38:00 PM
good to see you back, Jerry! I appreciate the narrative; it was compelling and kept me wondering 'where is this going.' Then the startling and truthful Haiku. This sounds like a personal experience and a powerful one that lingers on your mind. Have a pleasant evening, Sara
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Jerry Brotherton
Date: 3/20/2024 5:10:00 PM
Thanks for reading and leaving such a wonderful comment, Sara. I was 18, had never left my hometown and was stationed in Germany.

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