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On the Seashore

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August.10.2023

Choka Poetry Contest

Aponsor- Kim Rodrigues

On a warm evening, Sat idle on the seashore, Looking at the sea. As I was gazing, Violent breakers rose high, Crashing on the shore. Before me I saw, The savagery of the sea. Will it be at rest? I sat on the beach A little away from crowd, Breathing briny air. My mind became light. Can I be again a child, Playing on seashore? Watched small boats gliding. Saw swallows winging across And gulls circling round. With sun plunging down, Sharks were seen leaping over. Soon sky grew darker The crowd was leaving Will peace sooner descend down, To soothe my sad soul? What puzzles do the sea hold?

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/20/2023 6:42:00 PM

I enjoyed your sea imagery, Valsa!

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/13/2023 6:33:00 AM

Wonderful writing, a venture in verse, brilliant and breathtaking, poetry praises.... beautiful. God bless you always, Love, Gina

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/11/2023 11:19:00 AM

Truly, exquisitely crafted. Valsa, your poem possesses a remarkable beauty, adorned with captivating imagery. The allure of the ocean, which I hold dear, is brilliantly captured within its verses. I derived immense pleasure from its reading. Good luck with the contest.

Stephan McBride

Date: 8/11/2023 9:51:00 AM

Love the thought of remembering the joy of being a child playing on the seashore, the world becomes violent breakers crashing on the seashore as we grow and see the wickedness around us but blessed are those which find the joy of their youth : )

Di11y Da11y

Date: 8/11/2023 2:30:00 AM

Beautiful pondering Valsa! The freedom is there, somewhere - it's just about forgetting what others may think. The other option is play with a child - then everyone just things you are very in tune x

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/11/2023 1:51:00 AM

Definitely there are many puzzles down under the ocean which have never been discovered and are too dangerous to explore at the present time, but someday it will be different. I enjoyed reading this one today. Very creative work for the contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your thoughts and for dropping by my page. Sara

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/11/2023 1:03:00 AM

A lovely choka, Valsa:)

Christina Bowring

Date: 8/10/2023 11:32:00 PM

A beautiful poem dear Valsa with lovely imagery. I love being near the sea. Really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/10/2023 8:49:00 PM

Valsa, I enjoy these reflections by the sea --- H20, the ultimate mystery!

Joe Dimino

Date: 8/10/2023 7:36:00 PM

The sea is long recognized with soul journeys. A perfect subject for your searching poem. "The crowd was leaving Will peace sooner descend down, To soothe my sad soul?" There will always be a longing, a sense of feeling not entirely complete, until we are again united with our God in heaven. Excellent read!

Paige Hind

Date: 8/10/2023 1:04:00 PM

All the best for the contest! I liked the feel of your poem!

Jay Narain

Date: 8/10/2023 10:29:00 AM

Nice poem. Watching ocean in solitude brings many thoghts.