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On the Edge of Anguish

Sleep eludes me as I fidget in bed upon wrinkled sheets annoyed with the pensive fixation roving inside my head I hear his offensive words as they echo in my heartbeats Spontaneous fraying of nerves, an unraveling of thread Somehow I had to navigate through this turbulent water and find an open portal to serve as threshold to a dream There was nothing tangible to grasp, so I began to totter I choked on the edge of anguish, but swallowed a scream Suddenly a light burned bright. I was awash in revelation My thoughts were retrospective and aroused by intrigue I'd not allow him to patronize me in curses of defamation I slept peacefully, no longer stressed and battling fatigue ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Not contest bound, but written with a nod to John Hamilton for using the eight words he requires for his contest. Spontaneous Tangible Patronize Revelation Portal Navigate Fixation Intrigue

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Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 1/30/2020 3:36:00 PM

Such a beautiful piece so well penned Lin, showing good imagery with nice rhyme too.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/31/2020 5:41:00 AM

Thanks so much for your thoughtful words, Gordon.

John Hamilton

Date: 1/29/2020 12:32:00 PM

Beautiful writing as always Lin, is a winner in my eyes!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/29/2020 12:49:00 PM

John, your gentle and encouraging words have always been the only prize I value. I always entered your contests because I knew you would judge on merit. Thank you for being one of a few on this site that I would call 'friend.' One who never proved to be false in your words or actions, and for those qualities, you have my respect and admiration. This poem was inspired by your contest, though not entered, so thank you for recognizing it whereas some have complained that it's something I should not have done.

Ashok Kumar Mishra

Date: 1/25/2020 3:57:00 AM

Very expressive... Very well conclusion in the final verse expressing self determination... Emotion, give rise to a longing for sleep and then some dreams which make us to long for life again..... Very well penned

Lin Lane
Date: 1/25/2020 5:43:00 AM

Thank you, Ashok. I'm grateful for your visit and kind words.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 1/24/2020 8:31:00 PM

Lin, a wonderfully penned dark emotional poem that expresses the struggle of painful relationships, your pen is magical!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/25/2020 5:43:00 AM

Oh, how kind are you comments. Thanks ever so much for each of them, Tania.

Chris Green

Date: 1/24/2020 11:16:00 AM

Beautifully done my friend. Such a sad and dark piece that does allow a light to shine at the end of this tunnel.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/25/2020 5:42:00 AM

Thanks so much for your thoughts, Chris. They're always appreciated.

Jan Allison

Date: 1/24/2020 11:09:00 AM

wow Lin I was gripped from the start and didn't realise you'd used the words from the contest as it flowed so brilliantly:-) I can relate to your words to some degree and am glad the poem came to a peaceful conclusion :-)One for my faves:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 1/25/2020 5:41:00 AM

Thanks for the encouraging comments, Jan. Just because I no longer take part in contests doesn't mean I'm not inspired by some of them. I always check John's themes.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/24/2020 10:34:00 AM

It's not easy to compose a verse using allocated words, you've made it look easy Lin. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 1/24/2020 10:49:00 AM

Thanks so much, Tom. Sometimes the words are so diverse that it takes a titch more thought to pull them together in coherent poetry. I saw these materialize pretty quickly in my mind. Your comments always bend my lips into a smile.