On the Backslide

another somber rise of day through autumn's reign
where clouded thoughts backslide through eyes
while the anguish of my pain lies misted in the lash of october's skies
i watch as the breeze strips color from these trees
crimson drops aloft on the awry path, downward in spirals
like a child's mind trying to find assuage from life's affliction
through atrocious little lines carved upon shrouded flesh
in an auspicious attempt to find relief, momentarily unrestricted

sometimes i long to be like the leaves of autumn, spun golden
twirling in the allure of whispered breezes, adrift in the winds
carefree on the jaunt of life of these memories that taunt
other times, the appetency to be the tree is greater in depth,
to be bare, weightless and absolve the heaviness of life's burdens
as you cast them downward in wayward winds to their death
while your roots remain grounded, although twisted, still stand firm

sometimes i'd like to see the beauty in october through other's eyes
to glow in the dawn of my day, not shiver in its winded breath
beneath the grays of skies, where all i can see is impending death
in the season's foreshadow as the leaves slip like blood through hands


October 9, 2019
Crazy A's Poetry Contest
Sponsored by John Hamilton

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 1/27/2020 5:53:00 PM
Sandra, happy to have stumbled upon this timeless gem of autumn unfolding into winter. Your poetic fingerprints are all over this write and I can see why it was a winner (again)! Love the lines, "like the leaves of autumn, spun golden / twirling in the allure of whispered breezes, adrift in the winds / carefree on the jaunt of life". Congrats ~ John
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/27/2020 6:55:00 PM
Thank you so much John...glad to hear you enjoyed this one... autumn always draws power out of my muse...hugs
Date: 1/27/2020 2:48:00 PM
Sandy congrats on your win!;)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 1/27/2020 6:54:00 PM
Thank you so much Brenda....
Date: 11/6/2019 1:29:00 PM
Amazing imagery!! Congrats on your top win :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/6/2019 6:43:00 PM
Thank you so very much Heather....hugs
Date: 11/6/2019 11:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place win with this amazing piece of writing. Shows me that the judge has a keen eye for true talent. Bravo my friend.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/6/2019 11:20:00 AM
Thank you so much my friend, what a kind thing to say... i am deeply touched by your words.... hugs :)
Date: 11/5/2019 12:00:00 AM
I feel the same way about fall. This expresses so much. A fav for me!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/6/2019 11:20:00 AM
Thank you so much Juliet i am touched that you felt that highly of this poem...the fall and winter my least two favorite seasons... hugs
Date: 11/4/2019 6:29:00 AM
Back with congrats my friend--you deserve all the splendid accolades.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/4/2019 6:38:00 PM
Thank you so much my friend...sometimes i doubt my writes... hugs
Date: 11/3/2019 6:57:00 PM
Haha see I told you it was a winner women congrats! Well deserved!;)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/3/2019 8:38:00 PM
Well I had no doubt at all!;)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/3/2019 8:09:00 PM
yes you did :)...Thank you so much...i doubted it at times...
Date: 11/3/2019 6:16:00 PM
I knew this was you Sandy, your style is unmistakable and inimitable, congrats on another top win, a mesmerizing combination of imagery and emotion ...your specialty!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/3/2019 6:38:00 PM
wow thank you so much John...I am honored to stand among the best of them...i peeked at the list, you drew some great writes out with yet another great contest... thank you for always hosting them, for your kind words and the honor of yet another wonderful win.... hugs :)
Date: 10/15/2019 10:05:00 PM
Beautifully executed challenge, Sandra.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/30/2019 6:44:00 PM
thank you so much Line :) hugs
Date: 10/10/2019 6:06:00 PM
Though not familiar with the Crazy A's contest, I imagine that this will do well, given the lights-out imagery and the complexity of the back-and-forth between bliss and blood! Best always, Gershon
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/10/2019 6:24:00 PM
it was 8 A words, anguish being one...yes i do twist emotions in my poetry, i secretly hope it does great in the contest...i gave it my best as always... hugs :)
Date: 10/10/2019 7:05:00 AM
The vision alone is spectacular in this piece, tinted with a bit of sadness but filled with longing images of how the season is perceived by the poet and thoughts of how others might see it as well. The way you have taken each cycle of the tree and placed yourself in it is amazing. This was fantastic Sandy. Best wishes in the contest.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/10/2019 9:15:00 AM
Thank you so much Chris...fingers crossed that John likes it... hugs :)
Date: 10/10/2019 6:09:00 AM
You wrapped those crazy A's seamlessly in your verses of somber rise in autumn's reign..spun golden turning in the allure..excellent write, as always, Sandy.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/10/2019 9:14:00 AM
Thank you so much Vijay... this contest spoke to me within the rise of yesterday's somber skies... hugs :)
Date: 10/10/2019 4:30:00 AM
- A beautiful poem with your feelings, Sandra :) - Autumn is not my favorite time ... on a sunny day it can give us a beautiful picture ... but, seeing that beautiful nature dies is sad - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/10/2019 9:13:00 AM
I agree my friend...the beauty brings death...i was born in october at dislike this time of year... thank you :) hugs
Date: 10/9/2019 7:51:00 PM
Seems all agree woman a definite winner made!;) loved this!;)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/9/2019 7:58:00 PM
Thank you Brenda, John's contests always speak to me :) hopefully it appeals to men too, well at least the judge of the contest!
Date: 10/9/2019 7:50:00 PM
| She Scores!! | Absolutely Amazing ~ Loved This, My Friend!! a fave (and a winner, in my book)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/9/2019 7:56:00 PM
lol, thank you my friend...not so sure about the scoring but the somber day helped to set the scene for this one :) I am honored that it's a fave for you! hugs
Date: 10/9/2019 7:49:00 PM
A perfect write for the contest. (I tried, but was so bad with this one LOL) You did a wonderful write here. God bless you with many more beautiful poems. Love and prayers always, Gina
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Date: 10/9/2019 7:54:00 PM
what a sweet thing to say Gina. i am good at somber type poems...today was a gray, rainy somber autumn day so it helped set the mood for this one... love and blessings to you my friend :) hugs Sandy!
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