Probir Gupta Poet Jueju

On Jungle Grass

There on the brown jungle grass

We lie hemmed by moonlit horse

Deep sounds of drum from afar

Babylon breath dense and coarse
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23 March, 2017
[Qijue - 4 lines, 7 syllables each]
Contest: Form ‘J’ Jueju 
Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Paul Callus April 3, 2017 at 4:19 PM This verges on the original, Probir. I enjoyed the imagery and the Babylon reference. Congrats on your podium finish. Regards // paul Probir Gupta April 3, 2017 at 11:22 PM Thank you ... and regards ...

Kim Merryman April 3, 2017 at 12:20 PM Probir, you used some very creative imagery. Congrats on your great win! Blessings, Kim Probir Gupta April 3, 2017 at 12:23 PM Thank you so much, Kim ...

Andrea Dietrich April 2, 2017 at 7:45 PM Great imagery, Probir and a unique entry. Congrats for your win. Probir Gupta April 3, 2017 at 5:17 AM Thank you, Andrea for the appreciation ...

Constance La France April 2, 2017 at 4:25 PM Probir congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful Jueju that is very thought provoking~ Probir Gupta April 3, 2017 at 5:18 AM Thank you so much, Constance ... A joy to be in your contest ...

Reason A. Poteet March 29, 2017 at 12:55 PM I like the drum image especially. Not sure what Babylon breath could mean but something eerie and foreboding. Nice jueju, a 7. Probir Gupta April 1, 2017 at 10:19 AM Thank you much ... What can it mean if I say I am now in a Babylonian age ...

Lisa Ricci March 25, 2017 at 5:57 AM Hello Probir. I read your words twice to soak it all in. I'm impressed with your expressions and thought not to mention the entry's title. Best of luck with the contest. Well done Probir Gupta March 25, 2017 at 9:39 AM Thank you, Lisa ... Once you feel the Babylon breath, and of course there is no reason you won't , you are likely to like the figures ... success in contest is something else ...

Janis Medders Tobechi March 24, 2017 at 9:33 PM Fabulous four lines. GL in the contest. Probir Gupta March 25, 2017 at 9:51 AM Thank you so much for the encouraging assessment, Janis ...

Demetrios Trifiatis March 24, 2017 at 10:34 AM Fabulous my friend, Probir. A mystic writing. I have got problems with my computer! Probir Gupta March 25, 2017 at 9:54 AM Sorry for the delayed reply ... I couldn't come yesterday ... Yeah, mystic it is if you mean symbolic ... Thank you ...