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On Jungle Grass

There on the brown jungle grass We lie hemmed by moonlit horse Deep sounds of drum from afar Babylon breath dense and coarse ____________________________ 23 March, 2017 [Qijue - 4 lines, 7 syllables each] Contest: Form ‘J’ Jueju Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Paul Callus

Date: 4/3/2017 4:19:00 PM

This verges on the original, Probir. I enjoyed the imagery and the Babylon reference. Congrats on your podium finish. Regards // paul

Probir Gupta
Date: 4/3/2017 11:22:00 PM

Thank you ... and regards ...

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/3/2017 12:20:00 PM

Probir, you used some very creative imagery. Congrats on your great win! Blessings, Kim

Probir Gupta
Date: 4/3/2017 12:23:00 PM

Thank you so much, Kim ...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/2/2017 7:45:00 PM

Great imagery, Probir and a unique entry. Congrats for your win.

Probir Gupta
Date: 4/3/2017 5:17:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea for the appreciation ...

Constance La France

Date: 4/2/2017 4:25:00 PM

Probir congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful Jueju that is very thought provoking~

Probir Gupta
Date: 4/3/2017 5:18:00 AM

Thank you so much, Constance ... A joy to be in your contest ...

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 3/29/2017 12:55:00 PM

I like the drum image especially. Not sure what Babylon breath could mean but something eerie and foreboding. Nice jueju, a 7.

Probir Gupta
Date: 4/1/2017 10:19:00 AM

Thank you much ... What can it mean if I say I am now in a Babylonian age ...

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/25/2017 5:57:00 AM

Hello Probir. I read your words twice to soak it all in. I'm impressed with your expressions and thought not to mention the entry's title. Best of luck with the contest. Well done

Probir Gupta
Date: 3/25/2017 9:39:00 AM

Thank you, Lisa ... Once you feel the Babylon breath, and of course there is no reason you won't , you are likely to like the figures ... success in contest is something else ...

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 3/24/2017 9:33:00 PM

Fabulous four lines. GL in the contest.

Probir Gupta
Date: 3/25/2017 9:51:00 AM

Thank you so much for the encouraging assessment, Janis ...

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 3/24/2017 10:34:00 AM

Fabulous my friend, Probir. A mystic writing. I have got problems with my computer!

Probir Gupta
Date: 3/25/2017 9:54:00 AM

Sorry for the delayed reply ... I couldn't come yesterday ... Yeah, mystic it is if you mean symbolic ... Thank you ...