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On a Beautiful Lady On a Jeepney-Chanso

I wonder where she’s going to, This pretty maid in front of me; And why it is she looks so blue, Her sadness is so plain to see. What lovely silhouette she makes, Her face turned slightly to the side; Now and again deep breaths she takes And looks as though she’s teary-eyed. She is an Angel in distress-- What pain she bears I want to know, But I can’t ask her to confess Though I don’t want her yet to go. She lifts her hand to brush her hair; Now I can see her features clear. Her beauty shines amidst despair; I sit agape and watch her near. For one quick moment our eyes meet: I don’t know where to turn my gaze. I feel my heart does miss a beat, And everything seems but a haze. Today this scene still haunts my mind Although it transpired years behind. *Jeepney--traditional mode of transportation in the Philippines, with twin long seats, each accommodating 8-10 passengers facing each other. April 12, 2023 Chanso: 5 verses + 1 envoi 8 syllables per line, quatrain, iambic tetrameter Syllables checked with How Many Syllables Rhyme checked with RhymeZone Take a Chance on a Chanso Poetry Contest Sponsored by Kim Rodrigues

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Date: 7/12/2023 6:24:00 AM
Wow! Congratulations, Kabayan. Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
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Date: 7/11/2023 6:45:00 PM
An excellent write, Ryan! Love the title and how I can see this scene! Congratulations on first place!
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Date: 4/12/2023 1:16:00 PM
I enjoyed the theme of this poem. I saw a chanso elsewhere that looked different from this one, so I hope you are the one that did it right! Good luck in the contest
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Date: 4/12/2023 9:28:00 AM
Beautiful and well executed. Soft and thoughtful.
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