Okiyo

Gusty playful wind Whispered plot from high above Tiny leaf down my neck

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/28/2010 2:08:00 PM

very very very nice....bring it to the present tense...whispers plot or whispering plot and no capitalization is used in haiku....the last line is just wonderful...I can feel it and smell the wind too. (title is only line 1 of the haiku)Light & Love

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 3/15/2010 11:30:00 AM

Thank you for your recent comments on my work. I'll be looking for more from you...soon, I hope. Smiles, Dane Ann

James Fraser

Date: 3/14/2010 4:12:00 PM

A nice different approach in this Haiku >> James

Raul Moreno

Date: 3/13/2010 1:17:00 PM

Nice thought behind this Thomas and welcome to Poetry Soup. I hope you enjoy your stay...Raul

Date: 3/13/2010 12:53:00 PM

Nice use of imagery for a creative view. Interesting second line begs for more than one reading. Keep on writing! Karen

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/13/2010 6:54:00 AM

Nice haiku in both form and content, Tom. Well done! Haikus don't come easily to me so I applaud your talent here!!

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 3/13/2010 6:44:00 AM

Now that's a cute one, Tom. I like the playfulness of these words...and the plotting from the trees...kissed by the leaf! Smiles.(And thanks for your comment on my poetry today.) Enjoy your weekend. Lovingly, Dane Ann

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/13/2010 6:05:00 AM

Great Haiku..Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/13/2010 6:05:00 AM

Very vivid and visual ..with vibrant words Thomas... a painting in words.. thankxxx for sharing and for your always special comments on my poetry... just posted a new blog if u care to comment... thankxxx if u do..luv.. "Sweetheart"