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Oh Vulturous World

Note:***This poem is meant to be read from the bottom to the top, left to right ------------------------------------------------------------------ Never Again and you remain— For the World has gone from me and fled The stairway of my mind shall never end I accept the fate with the grinning dead Hello again demons, hello friends I remain Alas! I fall and I am done Tell me where have you fled, my love, my friend? For a moment I gaze upon the sun Here I am on earth again 1 Stair Remains Why can’t I be free? Tell me, why aren’t they looking at thee? Why are they looking at me? 2 Stairs Remain The garments of comfort I long to wear Knowing in my heart that I’ll never win I skip that grimy third stair Like most of my life has been 3 Stairs Remain Though my infected feet leave bloodstains I can’t release even a single tear The poisons encompass my river of veins I step on thorns of wrath and fear Enshrouded with pain! 4 Stairs Remain Oh, how am I to survive? Relieve me from this ever-fixed sadness Why can’t you just be alive? Cease this madness! 5 Stairs Remain As you breathe your very last breath The devilish fiends laugh at me They are blaming me for your death The deaths of the masses are calling me 6 Stairs Remain The carcasses you feed upon are glaring Oh! vulturous world so full of greed When everyone is staring God, redeem me! I just can’t succeed 7 Stairs Remain Of other fiendish sins And I feel the shivers Drowned by the turbulent wind My stale breath quivers 8 Stairs Remain Though we all aren’t free They laugh below in the hole where I fell The demons are haunting, taunting me Alone I wander blindly out of hell 9 Stairs Remain And my will is close to gone… The stairway continues on Forever hungry, forever stale I toil through death’s dark vale 10 Stairs Remain Why can’t we be free? My resistance is nearly gone The wretches are watching, stalking me I’m too exhausted to move on

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/27/2018 11:23:00 AM
My Dear Laura, Hope this finds YOU and YOURS Healthy and High in the Spirit. Once again I climb the Stairs of Life and Death, Good and Evil. Once again my Spirit is stumbling on my own weaknesses Up and Down. A favorite of mine. LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Liege...HG
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Date: 9/3/2016 1:49:00 PM
I've never climbed a poem before. Very good.
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Date: 9/2/2016 5:44:00 AM
It was, sort of, like going down a staircase (to Hell and back?). Interesting and nicely worded. ;-)
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Date: 9/1/2016 11:13:00 AM
Dark and hold the suspense, well penned. Congrats!
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Date: 2/27/2016 8:42:00 PM
Such dark distress, you, a Mistress of the unblessed, yet the journey of spirit must progress stained Poetess...to me this is an allegory of reincarnation, you, a beautiful and tormented traveler of Time's ruthless steps Laura. Very profound, edifying are your poetic pains. "Alone I wander blindly out of hell..." J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/28/2016 1:21:00 AM
<3<3<3 How sweet of you to delve into my older posts... thanks sweetheart. Love you! ~Laura
Date: 11/16/2015 6:43:00 PM
Yes, it is cool reading from bottom to top. Such massive guilt is present here. Did I ever mention a theory of guilt? Guilt is anger and hurt that are not expressed, and which is turned inward against us. Hard to believe it, but the feeling of being stared at conjures this up. Nice ending also. Back to the bottom. You have captured the essence of a bad day at the grave site. I hope you are well. Sounds like you are from your latest comments. Have a wonderful Thanksgiving next week!!
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Date: 9/23/2012 8:31:00 PM
Dear Laura, Blessings, As I said earlier I have writers block Your POETRY is Extremely Influential, this POEM is written by a Genious POETESS. I Bow to YOU, Laura I offer YOU the "GOLDEN QUILL of POETRY" ( an Imaginary Honor Lenore and I made up for each other ) Upon YOUR head a Wreath of Laurel for YOUR Laureatus POETRY LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR LIEGE...Harry
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Date: 6/5/2012 11:16:00 AM
A belated congratulations on your placement in Nikko's contest Laura. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/4/2012 11:23:00 AM
An awesome write here Laura!Congrats on your win!!
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Date: 6/3/2012 1:41:00 PM
This is very cool indeed... congrats Laura!
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Date: 6/3/2012 4:14:00 AM
impressive, laura... sending you my congrats and huggs! ;)
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Date: 6/3/2012 2:18:00 AM
Laura congrats on your win..David
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Date: 6/3/2012 1:25:00 AM
Dang, originality with a T! Gotta read this one several times...Great format and image of coming up from the depths of hell. WOW!!!! You are awesome! Gwendolen
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Date: 6/2/2012 11:40:00 AM
ABSOLUTELY AMAZING!!!!
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Date: 6/2/2012 9:52:00 AM
Hi Laura! this was one poem which truly made me wonder who wrote it...I read your note and got smitten. I read it from the bottom up and also got curious, I read it top to bottom and was just equally amazed....This is just wonderfully crafted, and also haunting! I felt like I was going through those stairs, just an amazing read!! Thank you so much for entering this awesome poem in my contest and super congrats to you! :D
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Date: 12/30/2011 4:28:00 PM
Dear Laura, Every time before I start commenting on YOUR Fantastic POETRY I Read THIS "ART of POETRY" A Tapestry designed by an Immeccable POETIC Mind I Also read this from top to bottom and read a completely Different POEM I adore YOUR Pen LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER, YOUR Liege...Harry
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Date: 11/10/2011 10:45:00 PM
Dear Laura, This is Just so Beautiful, but I think I would Like YOU to Climb 10 Stairs to Glory Which I will SOUP MAIL to YOU when it's done It's completely Inspired by YOU with this POETIC ART " Oh Vulturous World " read backwords I would however put it like this"Oh Vulturous World "(read backwords) otherwise it looks like read backwards is part of the Title to Many a new POET ( no age barrier for a NEW POET ) YOU are so clever and Talented that should read and Teach other POETS LOVE YOU~Harry
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Date: 10/30/2011 11:35:00 PM
Dear Laura, I'm so intrigued Soup Mail Call LOVE YOUR Superb Pen...Harry
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Date: 10/30/2011 9:07:00 PM
Dear Laura, I am at a lost for words This is the most Amazing POETRY I have Read I must ask Did YOU go to a special Literary School?? YOU have raised some long forgotten Memories of my Mind I can feel the Darkness of this POEM I will come back to this POEM later YOU are Phenominal LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Liege...Harry
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/13/2011 12:48:00 AM
Thank you very much for the suggestion, but unfortunately, the site won't let me use characters like parenthesis in my title. I would if I could though! Always, Laura
Date: 6/28/2011 8:10:00 PM
YOU'VE GOT TO BE KIDDING ME!...I'M JEALOUS
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Date: 5/30/2011 12:58:00 PM
Great form and a chilling read.
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Date: 5/28/2011 6:39:00 AM
Well dear poet, these have been...an explosive set of writes for the 27th of 5-11 ! And I am truly amazed ! Have a wonderful weekendzzzz...much love, james
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Date: 5/27/2011 12:59:00 PM
Beautify verses with fine steps looking at the realities of life, Laura
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