David Mohn Poet Haibun

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Jagged fragments of a puerile chorus compose my fledgling thoughts.
Each shrill shard impales my soul with piercing slivers of childish inflections.
     Looped refrains of callow mantras whorl my mind in endless rounds. 
          
                                   tantrumed harmonies,
                              sung upon a splintered stage…
                                      my inner children

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Deborah Burch December 6, 2016 at 8:51 PM Well done David!! Nice work. Big congrats on your win Brian's contest. Big Hugggs. Cap'n Deb

Skat A November 28, 2015 at 3:14 PM David:) A nice and creative win. Love SKAT

Connie Marcum Wong November 27, 2015 at 8:24 PM Too short...because it was too good David! Congratulations on your win! I loved it! #7

Dan Cwiak November 27, 2015 at 11:00 AM Beautiful, David. I wish there were more! Congrats on your win.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma November 26, 2015 at 9:39 PM Wonderful pen david.. congrats on big win!

Heather Ober November 26, 2015 at 3:13 PM David, this is such a unique haibun. Your prose is SO poetic. I found myself re-reading this one several times. Such an interesting haiku! Congrats :)

Charlotte Puddifoot November 26, 2015 at 7:46 AM a really interesting, intriguing one here; excellent writing, very poetic prose...i'm not usually keen on very short haibuns, but this one completely captivated me - congrats on your win in my contest!

Paul Callus November 13, 2015 at 1:22 PM Excellent, David! Even the prose section of this haibun is very poetic. #7 Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud November 10, 2015 at 12:59 AM your senses are truly alive in this wonderful piece,david..how are you?. huggs