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Of Permanent Dwellings

An episode of birds hovers beneath a marmalade moon , just for a while, as cotton-clouds sweep the brushed limbs of a sky ready to cradle the cloaks draping avian settlers; those who like us ascend on hammocks of dreams windblown by heady seasons gliding through embroidered spring, the livid lust in summer, on to a pious psalm come autumn, soon... opal stalagmites of winter: how abrupt and immediate this leaving! Here we are, beyond shadows tasting the song of evening walks soaring with Aurora’s mist vanishing into a world where permanence of cycles returns and repeats the refrains from humming rivers growing frail, until buds explode into leafy twirls sweeter than the scent of parsley on a fresh daylight…. icy, spicy, tangy. Birds tweet, to swivel back into ancestral nests much like us... wandering then yearning to kindle the fire and oil of sweet home. Somehow, seasons change… but our children’s dwellings and god ‘s grace do not. ............ 1/28/2016 For Cyndi Mac Millan's Contest FIVE PROOF: FREE VERSE THAT SHOWS IT AIN'T NO PROSE ...................... Literary devices: Assonance, Alliteration, Imagery, Mood, Synesthesia
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Puddifoot Avatar
February 29, 2016 at 1:36 PM
i'm finally getting round to comment on everybody! i agree with cyndi, a truly beautiful, graceful piece - "marmalade moon", "opal stalagmites of winter", lovely imagery - well done nette, it was a tough contest! :)
Delaney Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 10:05 PM
A sumptuous poem, even the winter icicles have the luster of opals. Congratulations. It is an honor to share a place with you on Cyndi's shortlist. HuGs, SuZ
Macmillan Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 9:01 PM
Nette, this is beautiful, lovely and so rich. I did love it and this contest was very very hard to judge. I have included you on my short list commentary, because it is an exceptional piece of writing and deserves fanfare. If you can, please stop by the blog. I know sometimes you have difficulties connecting to the blogs or being able to reply on them. Thank you, hon, for this beautiful write. xoxoxxo
Gibson Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 2:19 PM
This is pure loveliness. I always find my senses stunned when I read your work; no surprise that Cyndi included this in her list..it could easily have taken one of the top three places. Congratulations, Nette.
Fleming Avatar
January 30, 2016 at 3:53 PM
Sublime poetic verse...Simply beautiful! I honestly felt like I was reading from William Butler Yeats. A truly marvelous poem, Nette! My very best wishes as always. :) john
Callus Avatar
January 29, 2016 at 12:19 PM
This ain't no prose...it is poetry! The imagery and appeal to the senses are charming and powerful. #7+ Hugs // paul
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 1:43 PM
This is a beautiful entry Nette. The lovely picture enhances your verses. I hope to see this a top winner. Cheers, Connie
Sabre Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 10:51 AM
Artful use of imagery and mood. The ceremony of seasons portrayed through birds coming and going is a prelude to the central theme---permanence of love for home and god. Nice to hear from you!
Marty Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 1:16 AM
Exceptional poem! The migration of birds implies seasonal changes and how you express this through flights of imagery then brings me home to what is unchangeable-- that is a pivotal moment, indeed!
Parker Avatar
January 27, 2016 at 7:36 PM
Outstanding poem my poetic friend filled with lush color and soft renderings and yet lands with both feet planted firmly in the earth...good luck
Sage Avatar
January 27, 2016 at 4:44 PM
nice imagery there Nette...well written and best of luck in the contest
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