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Of Light Rays

The light appears Behind rare scene Seer astounds Greatest of sight Of light bouncing Come bright colors Placed over truth Light proof inside Uncouth passing Russell Sivey Entrant into nette onclaud's "** THAN-BAUK A TWILIGHT" contest 4/11/2012

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/11/2012 6:47:00 PM

Interesting work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/11/2012 12:59:00 PM

brilliantly written Russell.. an exhilarating expression of rhyme in this tricky form luv.. good luck in contest.. uncouth passing is so tremendous luv..

Jack Horne

Date: 4/11/2012 8:02:00 AM

beautiful than bauk, russell

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/11/2012 2:12:00 AM

thanks for joining, russell.. so nice!.. kindly check rhyme pattern and syl count... i have placed an example on the contest page.. if you need to revise, just edit and update your poem... will do another blog on this later!:) huggs!

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet

Date: 4/11/2012 12:49:00 AM

boldly amazing.well done.

Brenda Victoria Northeast

Date: 4/10/2012 11:30:00 PM

Very well done Russell : ) Blessings, bren