Ode To Bad Attitude

I turn the key.
Was it even locked?
Gently, I nudged it open.
Finding myself alone again
was not to my liking.
Maybe I should have seen it coming.
But, I forced myself to sidestep the issue.
The hurried ending of calls as I neared,
should have spoken to me, 
but I paid no attention, or so I appeared.
Who could have believed all those feeble
excuses for the late suppers.
The times when “she didn’t feel like it” had
a ratio of ten to one.  But I rationalized. 
Well, she had been busy, only who knows at what.
But she had been busy.  
And the check book, so, unusually 
accurately balanced?  That’s a new one. 
Crap!!! She didn’t even leave the foyer light on.
I swear.  
Setting the brief case down to
remove my coat, the light 
suddenly came on.

“HAPPY BIRTHDAY”!!!!!!!
chorused twenty voices. 

©  29 Nov 2010  For Matt's "Empty Apartment" contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Dietrich Avatar
December 22, 2010 at 9:23 AM
ahahahaha. VERY clever, this one, Charles. surprised not to see congrats written on this one! sorry I did not get your meaning about "what" was eluding you. I had just finished reading Daver's remarks below yours and he had not understood my poem's meaning, so I thought you were saying the same. Well, just time to post a new poem and get going with my mom! Luv, Andrea
Bailey Avatar
December 14, 2010 at 6:49 PM
Clever poem.
Devonshire Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 8:55 AM
Very clever, Charles! You set us up and surprised us with a happy ending. How wonderful of your wife to plan a surprise party for you. This is the only entry for this contest that makes the reader feel good and I'm sure it will be a winner. Thanks for your kind words regarding my father; he meant the world to me and probably always will. With the standards he set, you can see why I have a hard time meeting the right man. Love and blessings for a wonderful holiday, Carolyn
Mehta Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 8:02 AM
It is really very witty and sarcastic write, Charles
Brown Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 7:00 AM
We are having our first laying snowfall this morning in Springfield,Ohio. December 1,2010 what a way to enter this month. It is absolutely beautiful and finds me in good spirits. I have enjoyed reading your poetry this morning Charles as usual. Looking forward to reading more. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol
Johnson Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 8:20 PM
Don't you just HATE it when you're trying to be mad and someone makes you SMILE!!! LOL I enjoyed this very much! Thank you for sharing! ~Bettty
Kendrick Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 4:58 PM
Nice twist to the end..Good luck in the contest..Enjoyed reading your work..Sara
Sweetheart Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 4:46 PM
Very interesting and suspenseful write Charles.. keeping the reader very intense with this entry.. good luck in Matt's contest my friend with luv..
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