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Ode To Bad Attitude

I turn the key. Was it even locked? Gently, I nudged it open. Finding myself alone again was not to my liking. Maybe I should have seen it coming. But, I forced myself to sidestep the issue. The hurried ending of calls as I neared, should have spoken to me, but I paid no attention, or so I appeared. Who could have believed all those feeble excuses for the late suppers. The times when “she didn’t feel like it” had a ratio of ten to one. But I rationalized. Well, she had been busy, only who knows at what. But she had been busy. And the check book, so, unusually accurately balanced? That’s a new one. Crap!!! She didn’t even leave the foyer light on. I swear. Setting the brief case down to remove my coat, the light suddenly came on. “HAPPY BIRTHDAY”!!!!!!! chorused twenty voices. © 29 Nov 2010 For Matt's "Empty Apartment" contest

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Date: 12/22/2010 9:23:00 AM
ahahahaha. VERY clever, this one, Charles. surprised not to see congrats written on this one! sorry I did not get your meaning about "what" was eluding you. I had just finished reading Daver's remarks below yours and he had not understood my poem's meaning, so I thought you were saying the same. Well, just time to post a new poem and get going with my mom! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 12/14/2010 6:49:00 PM
Clever poem.
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Date: 12/1/2010 8:55:00 AM
Very clever, Charles! You set us up and surprised us with a happy ending. How wonderful of your wife to plan a surprise party for you. This is the only entry for this contest that makes the reader feel good and I'm sure it will be a winner. Thanks for your kind words regarding my father; he meant the world to me and probably always will. With the standards he set, you can see why I have a hard time meeting the right man. Love and blessings for a wonderful holiday, Carolyn
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Date: 12/1/2010 8:02:00 AM
It is really very witty and sarcastic write, Charles
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Date: 12/1/2010 7:00:00 AM
We are having our first laying snowfall this morning in Springfield,Ohio. December 1,2010 what a way to enter this month. It is absolutely beautiful and finds me in good spirits. I have enjoyed reading your poetry this morning Charles as usual. Looking forward to reading more. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/30/2010 8:20:00 PM
Don't you just HATE it when you're trying to be mad and someone makes you SMILE!!! LOL I enjoyed this very much! Thank you for sharing! ~Bettty
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Date: 11/30/2010 4:58:00 PM
Nice twist to the end..Good luck in the contest..Enjoyed reading your work..Sara
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Date: 11/30/2010 4:46:00 PM
Very interesting and suspenseful write Charles.. keeping the reader very intense with this entry.. good luck in Matt's contest my friend with luv..
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