Paul Callus Poet Ottava rima

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Oblivious To Love

She walks barefooted in a slit swing dress
on verdant grass; her hair a blaze of gold.
Light wind is teasing with a sweet caress
I look in envy, yet my tongue I hold
lurking in shadows, yearning to profess
my deep emotions, but I am not bold. 
Her perfume hits me, wafting through the air.
Of my existence she is unaware.

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Contest: Form 'O' ~ Only One
Sponsor: Broken Wings
Placed 2nd
18th May 2017

POTD 20th May 2017

Ottava Rima consists of eight 10 or 11 syllable 
lines, with a rhyme scheme of ABABABCC.

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Rhoda Tripp January 2, 2018 at 10:33 AM This lovely write makes me want to grip the man by the shoulders and gently shake and whisper "Say something, dammit", so if emotionally distraught readers is what you were after, mission accomplished. Lol. Great write, Paul. I'm going to spend the rest of my day sucking my thumb in an infantile position. Unrequited does that to me. Paul Callus January 2, 2018 at 2:34 PM Thank you, Rhoda; as always your comments make for pleasant reading! I bet she knew all the time about him and took pleasure in teasing and game playing. Perhaps all he needed was a slight shove...pity you weren't around at the time:) Regards // paul

Susan Ashley December 2, 2017 at 12:00 PM Paul, such enticing, graceful lines of lovely longing in your beautifully enchanting write of unrequited love. So romantic, delicate and bittersweet.. a poetic recipe for a fabulous poem my friend. Love it! Paul Callus December 3, 2017 at 2:16 PM You have made out all the ingredients that I stirred in this poem, Susan:) Thank you for yet another lovely visit, my friend. Warm regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich May 29, 2017 at 4:42 PM This is utterly gorgeous. you have the talent for lyrical verse, Paul and I love this one. Belated Congrats too. Can't believe I never saw this one yet! Paul Callus May 30, 2017 at 10:57 AM Thank you, Andrea. I'm afraid I had missed yours, too, but now I'm pleased to find that we both finished on the podium:) Regards // paul

Pashang Salehi May 25, 2017 at 2:37 AM That is hard to believe ....unaware of you !! impossible... with your talent.. Paul Callus May 25, 2017 at 11:41 AM Aww you are too kind, Pashang:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Maria Williams May 24, 2017 at 6:22 AM I see with this wonderful poem of yours a double celebration is in order. So well deserved. A belated congratulations Paul. A7++ Maria Paul Callus May 24, 2017 at 11:41 AM Your visit and congrats are most welcome, Maria...so is the high rating; thank you. Regards // paul

Anne-Marie Coreggia May 23, 2017 at 6:00 AM You managed to express so much in such a few striking words; congratulations on PotD Paul:) Paul Callus May 23, 2017 at 1:47 PM Thank you Anne-Marie:) Your comments and congrats are appreciated. Regards // paul

Constance La France May 22, 2017 at 8:39 AM Paul congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful write and i love the image too Paul Callus May 23, 2017 at 1:45 PM Thank you, Constance. Always a pleasure taking part in your contests. Regards // paul

Joseph May May 21, 2017 at 9:08 AM Congrats on your win Paul Paul Callus May 23, 2017 at 1:17 PM Ah...I see you're back again, Joseph; thank you:) // paul

Chris Hagy May 20, 2017 at 9:55 PM This is very elegant, and beautifully crafted...you have a knack for so many poetry forms :) Hope you are marvelous in Malta :) Paul Callus May 23, 2017 at 1:02 PM Thank you for the generous comments, Chris:) Weather in Malta is beautiful right now, not like the political scene where we're facing a snap election brought around by corrupt leaders. Regards // paul

Joseph May May 20, 2017 at 7:43 PM A love yet to be...Congrats on POTD.. Paul Callus May 23, 2017 at 12:52 PM Thank you, Joseph...regards // paul

John Michaels May 20, 2017 at 5:33 PM Swinging back around to offer congrats for PotD! Just as striking on a second reading! Very well-deserved! Regards, John. Paul Callus May 23, 2017 at 12:32 PM Thank you, John; a repeat visit is appreciated. Regards // paul

Maurice Yvonne May 20, 2017 at 4:50 PM Congratulations Paul. Beautifully sad. A great choice for poem of the day. Paul Callus May 23, 2017 at 12:31 PM Pleased to see you hanging out again, Armand:) Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Eve Roper May 20, 2017 at 11:49 AM Beautiful poem, Paul, congratulations on POTD ~* Paul Callus May 23, 2017 at 12:15 PM Thank you, Eve. Warm regards ~ paul

Sunlite Wanter May 20, 2017 at 11:23 AM So glad your poem is POTD! Paul Callus May 21, 2017 at 4:24 AM Thank you, Sunlite. Have a nice day:) Regards // paul

Anita Harris May 20, 2017 at 10:40 AM Written beautifully. Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 5:38 PM Thank you, Anita:) Regards // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr. May 20, 2017 at 9:52 AM I agree w/Richard, a quite beautiful sadness, Paul. Expressed w/such desirous yearning. Kudos for POTD, my talented friend. Your work speaks for itself. Lots of love and smiles. Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 5:37 PM Your complimentary words are always appreciated, my friend. Thank you and best regards. // paul

Richard Lamoureux May 20, 2017 at 9:35 AM You portrayed a beautiful sadness.. Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 5:14 PM Thank you, Richard. Regards // paul

John Michaels May 20, 2017 at 9:02 AM Powerful imagery and the raw emotion of that desire is perfectly captured. Best of luck in the contest. Regards, John. Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 4:59 PM Thank you for the lovely comments, John. Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 20, 2017 at 9:01 AM Wonderful pen 7 & congratulations on potd! Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 4:39 PM Pleased to make your acquaintance, Maureen! Thank you for both lovely comment and congrats. Regards // paul

Charlie Smith May 20, 2017 at 7:35 AM Great form, wonderful execution Paul, congratulations for POTD honors. Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 4:24 PM Your complimentary remarks are truly appreciated, Charlie...thank you! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen May 20, 2017 at 7:30 AM - Beautiful poem, Paul - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. :) - Happy weekend - hugs and a 7 // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 4:15 PM Many thanks, Anne-Lise:) Wishing you, too, a very lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

Lisa Ricci May 20, 2017 at 6:53 AM Good Morning Paul. This is marvelous poetry that is complete and poetic. I can see how it was selected. Congratulations to you and your entry on POTD. It is deserving in every way. Further, good luck with the contest. Well done entirely. Enjoy the day. Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 4:14 PM Thank you for the generous comments, Lisa:) Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Akkina Downing May 20, 2017 at 5:32 AM Good morning Mr. Callus, what a lovely read this morning. Best of luck in the contest and congrats on potd... hugs :) Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 4:00 PM Thank you, Akkina:) May I wish you a very lovely weekend!! Regards // paul

Kudzai Mhangwa May 20, 2017 at 4:50 AM Lovely poem! Congratulations! Paul Callus May 20, 2017 at 4:04 PM Thank you, Kudzai. Pleased to have you stopping by. // paul

Joanna Daniel May 19, 2017 at 10:39 AM A nice one, Paul, hope it does well in the contest:) Paul Callus May 19, 2017 at 1:05 PM Thank you, Jo. Have a nice weekend. Regards // paul

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