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I strut the lane of vagrancy With breaths choking from evening’s plea, As lampposts dip across the night When love undone grates my delight; Reflecting scenes... a cracked marquee. Trapped in the void of emptied lea A begging howls... my cries decree For sparks to glow, to take new flight! I strut the lane. On narrow bends, I find no glee Against clogged lamps, an eve’s debris Oblivious to new morn’s rite… While ravens croon with all their might, This heart nailed bears dusk’s agony. I strut the lane. rob carmack's Oblivion Contest 12/10/2015 * oblivious---4 syl count

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Date: 12/24/2015 10:54:00 PM
Sorry that I previously missed replying to this contest being finished. Congrats on your well deserved win my friend.
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Date: 12/23/2015 3:50:00 AM
Greetings Nette. Congrats for your #1 placement in the contest! ;-)
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Date: 12/20/2015 4:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win!
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Date: 12/20/2015 12:23:00 AM
Nette, Congrats on your win In Rob Carmack's Oblivion contest. Love ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/19/2015 9:25:00 PM
Congratulations on 1st place win!
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Date: 12/19/2015 5:25:00 PM
Congrats on your well deserved win Nette! *smiles*
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:23:00 PM
Nette, Congrats on your Oblivion WIN **SKAT**
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Date: 12/19/2015 1:51:00 PM
Congratulation for your win..my poetic friend
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Date: 12/19/2015 12:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this dramatically moving poem. Janice
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Date: 12/17/2015 3:51:00 AM
lines with curves of wisdom and landscapes of awe! My mind is in a park of joy to how I manage selecting this page. Keep on writing dear poet and as always, a wonderful 7 without a doubt!
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Date: 12/14/2015 9:45:00 AM
You are the master (mistress) of the singular phrase... no one else writes quite like you. '...I strut the lane of vagrancy,' '...this heart nailed bears dusk's agony,' simple outstanding! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 12/13/2015 1:16:00 AM
So dynamic - I am delightfully impressed, Nette - so good ... CayCay
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Date: 12/9/2015 10:27:00 PM
Wow..I sense a bad night and a day not worth looking forward to...may be way off base here but my imagination was taken on a ride here nett...raw feelings put out there..loved it...
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Date: 12/9/2015 9:05:00 PM
Cool how you did it in this style of poetry. I think rob will really like it. Crossing my fingers anyway, for both of us!!!
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Date: 12/9/2015 9:05:00 PM
hey where is your sports one liner?
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Date: 12/9/2015 4:30:00 PM
I love this Nette;) gl in the contest you will do great!- Laura lu
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Date: 12/9/2015 2:25:00 PM
There is glory in the lonely mood of this splendid poem. She still struts! You move me; thank you!
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Date: 12/9/2015 1:43:00 PM
- I feel this touching Nette, but great written - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/9/2015 1:40:00 PM
Intense that I could feel the sadness within your expressive poem! Likewise, choosing a rondeau as your vehicle amps the value of your verse!
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Date: 12/9/2015 12:42:00 PM
A dreamy and serious poem and well worded. I wish you well in the contest.
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Date: 12/9/2015 12:10:00 PM
What a dark lonely poem, and yet the word strut seems to evoke power...good luck in the contest
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