Nette Onclaud Poet Rondeau

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Oblivious

I strut the lane of vagrancy
With breaths choking from evening’s plea,
As lampposts dip across the night
When love undone grates my delight;
Reflecting scenes... a cracked marquee.

Trapped in the void of emptied lea
A begging howls... my cries decree
For sparks to glow, to take new flight!
I strut the lane.

On narrow bends, I find no glee
Against clogged lamps, an eve’s debris
Oblivious to new morn’s rite…
While ravens croon with all their might,
This heart nailed bears dusk’s agony.
I strut the lane.



rob carmack's Oblivion Contest
12/10/2015
* oblivious---4 syl count

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Robert Lindley December 24, 2015 at 10:54 PM Sorry that I previously missed replying to this contest being finished. Congrats on your well deserved win my friend.

Teddy Kimathi December 23, 2015 at 3:50 AM Greetings Nette. Congrats for your #1 placement in the contest! ;-)

Hansteven Selfa December 20, 2015 at 4:34 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win!

Poet Destroyer A December 20, 2015 at 12:23 AM Nette, Congrats on your win In Rob Carmack's Oblivion contest. Love ~LINDA~

Susan Gentry December 19, 2015 at 9:25 PM Congratulations on 1st place win!

Beautiful Scars December 19, 2015 at 5:25 PM Congrats on your well deserved win Nette! *smiles*

Skat A December 19, 2015 at 2:23 PM Nette, Congrats on your Oblivion WIN **SKAT**

Frederic Parker December 19, 2015 at 1:51 PM Congratulation for your win..my poetic friend

Janice Canerdy December 19, 2015 at 12:30 PM Congratulations on your win with this dramatically moving poem. Janice

Funom Makama December 17, 2015 at 3:51 AM lines with curves of wisdom and landscapes of awe! My mind is in a park of joy to how I manage selecting this page. Keep on writing dear poet and as always, a wonderful 7 without a doubt!

Keith Bickerstaffe December 14, 2015 at 9:45 AM You are the master (mistress) of the singular phrase... no one else writes quite like you. '...I strut the lane of vagrancy,' '...this heart nailed bears dusk's agony,' simple outstanding! Best wishes, Keith

CayCay Godwin December 13, 2015 at 1:16 AM So dynamic - I am delightfully impressed, Nette - so good ... CayCay

Donna Jones December 9, 2015 at 10:27 PM Wow..I sense a bad night and a day not worth looking forward to...may be way off base here but my imagination was taken on a ride here nett...raw feelings put out there..loved it...

Andrea Dietrich December 9, 2015 at 9:05 PM hey where is your sports one liner?

Andrea Dietrich December 9, 2015 at 9:05 PM Cool how you did it in this style of poetry. I think rob will really like it. Crossing my fingers anyway, for both of us!!!

Beautiful Scars December 9, 2015 at 4:30 PM I love this Nette;) gl in the contest you will do great!- Laura lu

Banjo Casto December 9, 2015 at 2:25 PM There is glory in the lonely mood of this splendid poem. She still struts! You move me; thank you!

Anne-Lise Andresen December 9, 2015 at 1:43 PM - I feel this touching Nette, but great written - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Carly Lalion December 9, 2015 at 1:40 PM Intense that I could feel the sadness within your expressive poem! Likewise, choosing a rondeau as your vehicle amps the value of your verse!

Ralph Sergi December 9, 2015 at 12:42 PM A dreamy and serious poem and well worded. I wish you well in the contest.

Frederic Parker December 9, 2015 at 12:10 PM What a dark lonely poem, and yet the word strut seems to evoke power...good luck in the contest