Oblivion

Obsidian hearts – no longer beating -
Buried under magna and turned to stone.
Lodged in stupor – consciousness deleting -
In a state where the sun has never shone.
Vast emptiness surrounds them now like outer space.
Infinitude of blackness . . . is this hell?
Obtuseness overwhelmed them and stole their grace.
Never-ending nothingness – it serves them well.

Sept. 23, 2021 - Theme #1: Oblivion
For the '''O'' Contest, NEW POEMS' Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Constance La France
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La France Avatar
October 5, 2021 at 8:00 AM
Adrea, congratulations on your win in my "O" contest with this wonderful Acrostic poem, well done ~ love and serenity _Constance
Proxenos Avatar
October 3, 2021 at 12:23 PM
Congratulations Andrea a truly deserved win - to be without faith is absolute oblivion. Enjoyed your poem so much. Hug, Jennifer.
Peck Avatar
October 1, 2021 at 3:40 PM
Beautiful. I especially love the first two lines, altho each line is wonderful. Congratulations on your win!
Kauffman Avatar
September 28, 2021 at 10:29 AM
Wonderfully done Andrea! I especially love the volcanic image of magna around an "obsidian heart" blotting out light and life. Congratulations on your win and high fives for this gem that gets to the "heart" of stone cold hearts.
Krutsinger Avatar
September 27, 2021 at 10:08 PM
I especially liked this line "Infinitude of blackness . . . is this hell?" But I like the entire missive.
Jayasankar Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 11:06 AM
"Never- ending Nothingness"... Loved this... and every line so meaningful my friend... Congrats on your win.. I didn't get enough time for Soup ... trying to read some poems and comment Ria... Hugs... ~ Ani
Bayles Avatar
September 25, 2021 at 4:58 PM
Andrea, I came in to say I'm glad you like the first poem in the book. I always hope people will like it. Thanks for the compliment. Mike
Poet Avatar
September 25, 2021 at 5:25 AM
Congratulations on your top win Andrea, you deserve it with this wonderfully penned poem.
Y. Avatar
September 24, 2021 at 11:46 PM
Hi Andrea, I'm just coming back to congratulations on a well-deserved win. Have a great evening and weekend:-) Alexis
Alex Avatar
September 24, 2021 at 10:56 PM
Great thinking in acrostic form.Beautiful writing. Congratulations!
Liguori Avatar
September 24, 2021 at 3:53 PM
Nice imagery!
Evans Avatar
September 24, 2021 at 1:59 PM
Congratulations. They say, hell is here on earth... must be all the high and mighty with all their power and money getting more greedy and self-grandiosity while others are homeless and malnourished. Have a great week-end.
Dietrich Avatar
September 26, 2021 at 10:37 AM
that's a part of it!! thanks, Marilene.
Skelly Avatar
September 24, 2021 at 8:17 AM
Good luck in contest Andrea. I ended up going for ocean. It's a good challenge...Delice
Mcintosh Avatar
September 24, 2021 at 6:26 AM
Excellent writing. Awesome. Love it. God bless you with a win, dear friend. Love, Gina
Rodrigues Avatar
September 24, 2021 at 6:20 AM
Wow! A fave for me!
Buhagiar Avatar
September 24, 2021 at 2:23 AM
Can't see how you'' get top place. Hugs.
Daniel Avatar
September 23, 2021 at 11:25 PM
Such brilliant writing, Andrea:)
Y. Avatar
September 23, 2021 at 4:53 PM
WoW! Andrea, You nailed this contest challenge. And hit the ball out of the park. I wanted to use the word “ oblivion,” but I couldn’t come up with anything. You described the word to a T. That sounds like hell( or a type of hell ). Good content and imagery. Congrats in advance- Alexis
Dietrich Avatar
September 23, 2021 at 9:35 PM
Yes, Alexis, it would be like hell!!! Thank you for the comment.
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