O, Time

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March 6, 2024
Placed 1st: Time Poetry Contest by Ink Empress


 

Painting dream-scapes upon canvas of vermilion skies,
O, time! how you elevate my dawn in periwinkle sunrise,
As day’s footprints, glistening amber tapestries rise,
When rhythms of birds, with musical winds harmonize.

O, immortal aura of time! has anyone ever seen you?
Spectacular at birth: wasn’t the big-bang your debut?
What your omnipresence looks like, I have nary a clue,
Ruling my existence, as seamlessly you pass through.

Mockery of love you make, fading it over your domain,
Hurting hearts once enamored, feeling pain of your reign,
O, time! you changed me~ who I was, I’m not the same,
Robbing my vigor as I age, sadly my exuberance you tame.

You transform themes of now, into dreams of morrow,
Planting seeds of hope, healing my wounds of sorrow,
As through your wintry woes rise, avid spring meadows,
Shining motifs of today, glinting yesterday’s shadows.

Moments you take, as earth rotates, turning into days,
Yearning for infinity as you traverse into eternal haze;
Audaciously presupposing your empire shall never end,
As ceaselessly through heaven and earth you transcend.

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Date: 3/25/2024 6:52:00 AM
A lovely Personification poem, Vijay. I see congratulations are in order, my friend. You've explained time and her influence in a beautifully poetic way. Thanks for sharing your gift with us. Bill
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Date: 3/9/2024 3:40:00 PM
This is lovely personification of time, its importance to our lives, not to disregard it as we ought to live sensibly by it. This is such a precious and romantic take on time...J
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:41:00 AM
Much appreciate Josefina--many thanks.
Date: 3/9/2024 3:37:00 PM
Dear Vijay, many congratulations with your very worthy win. This is a magnificent poem that captures time and its effects so beautifully and exquisitely. It’s such a captivating read with so many wonderful poetic lines. ‘ Robbing my vigor as I age, sadly my exuberance you tame’ many will relate to. A very reflective read. So enjoyed it dear Vijay. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:41:00 AM
So very kind of you Christina. I visited your page looking for a new poem--perhaps one is on the way. Much appreciate you stopping by--many thanks.
Date: 3/9/2024 7:24:00 AM
Vijay, your vivid descriptions have captured the essence of time--that intangible force we're blessed with. Janice
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Date: 3/11/2024 6:41:00 AM
Thank you Janice--much appreciate.
Date: 3/8/2024 10:09:00 PM
Vijay, your poem on time is cloaked in elegance and wonder. It is in my faves. Congratulations on your win. :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:39:00 AM
You are so very kind, my friend. Your thoughtful remarks and your FAVE are much appreciated, Evelyn--many thanks.
Date: 3/8/2024 9:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Vijay!
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Date: 3/11/2024 6:38:00 AM
Thank you Karen--much appreciate.
Date: 3/8/2024 2:22:00 PM
Time's empire is eternal, Well crafted Vijay, I enjoyed the read
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Date: 3/11/2024 6:38:00 AM
Much appreciate--many thanks, Joseph.
Date: 3/8/2024 10:06:00 AM
Dear Vijay, this is a beautiful ode to time, so well crafted with not just evocative thoughts that resonate, but such artistic lines so creatively crafted, i love the imagery and flow of your lines, especially the opening lines truly drew me in. So captivating and soulfully moving! Vermilion skies to periwinkle sunrise, left me breathless! I also love your rhymes and the cadence of your poem, you always leave me in awe and this is another one that is truly worthy of a fave and first place! “ O, time! you changed me~ who I was, I’m not the same, Robbing my vigor as I age, sadly my exuberance you tame.” just love that! And every word woven here! Congratulations on your well deserved win! Thank you for writing!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:37:00 AM
Thank you for sponsoring contest, Ink. I know it is not easy. Your thoughtful feedback is always appreciated, my friend. I am honored by your FAVE and your supportive comments.
Date: 3/7/2024 6:47:00 AM
A lovely write that will surely rise up on the winner’s list! Each verse sublime! Enters with painting dreamscapes then beats with audaciously presupposing…A fave, Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:35:00 AM
Honored by your FAVE, my friend. Much appreciate your thoughts, Kim--many thanks.
Date: 3/6/2024 7:19:00 PM
Like wind sweeping across a canvas, time moves that quickly. Moments turn into days and then, months change into years. This happens in the twinkling of an eye. Time is precious, indeed ! We should cherish each and every moment given. My best to you, Vijay. Hugs, Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:34:00 AM
Yes indeed--it is precious. Much appreciate, my friend. Thank you for being there. Hugs to you as well.
Date: 3/6/2024 3:59:00 PM
Vijay. I think your poem describes what we're dealing with very thoroughly. Time has a huge impact on everything and we're certainly stuck with its passage and the effects that come with it.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:33:00 AM
Much appreciate your visit and comments, Duke--many thanks.
Date: 3/6/2024 3:08:00 PM
"Mockery of love you make, fading it over your domain, Hurting hearts once enamored, feeling pain of your reign," Wonderful, honest, heartfelt read. It cannot be explained...if relying solely on surface ministers and gut experience. Blessings my friend. Thoughtful and deep. Good luck in contest.
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Date: 3/11/2024 6:32:00 AM
So very kind of you Joe. Many thanks, my friend.
Date: 3/6/2024 2:30:00 PM
A nice entry for the contest Veej. What is time, really? Who knows. It exists. My fave line is line 2. I know inky is gonna love that periwinkle sunrise
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:32:00 AM
Thank you Tom--much appreciate.
Date: 3/6/2024 12:31:00 PM
In your poem, Time is personified as a powerful force that shapes human experiences and emotions. The poet uses metaphorical language to depict time's influence on love, growth, and the passage of seasons, adding layers of meaning to the poem's imagery... It rhymes and flows really well.. for me, personification is different, but we all have our own interpretation of things.. Best of luck in the contest..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:32:00 AM
Much appreciate your insights my friend. Many thanks, SO.
Date: 3/6/2024 12:27:00 PM
Creative way to go with this. Time does take its toll on us no matter how good or bad our life may be. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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Date: 3/11/2024 6:31:00 AM
Many thanks Sara--much appreciate.
Date: 3/6/2024 11:16:00 AM
Dear Vijay, Your poems is quite a captivating ode to the enigmatic nature of time and its profound influence on our lives. Through your lyrical language, you skillfully convey the multifaceted essence of time, from its celestial origins to its transformative power over love, life, and existence. Your words evoke introspection, inviting me the reader to contemplate the fleeting yet eternal nature of time. It is a beautifully crafted piece with the universal experience of grappling with the passage of time. - Blessings, Daniel
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:31:00 AM
Thoughtful feedback, as always, Daniel. Much appreciate--many thanks.
Date: 3/6/2024 10:58:00 AM
Excellent poem, Vijay, explores the deep influence of time on human life, delving into its impact on emotions and experiences, while also highlighting its eternal quality. Your use of vivid and descriptive language such as "canvas of vermilion skies" and "rhythms of birds, with musical winds harmonize" creates captivating imagery. The poem skillfully incorporates personification in phrases like "time! How you elevate my dawn" and "mockery of love you make," Best Wishes for the contest
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:30:00 AM
Thank you my friend. You always spend the time to share your insights in a meaningful way. Much appreciate!
Date: 3/6/2024 9:14:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "O, Time" write/ending. "Good Luck" Looks like we both did time. Have a wonderful spring day.........................
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:29:00 AM
Thank you Paula--much appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 3/6/2024 9:03:00 AM
Excellent portrayal of time and its journey in our lives. Beautifully done.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/11/2024 6:28:00 AM
Glad you stopped by, Jay. Many thanks--much appreciate.
Date: 3/6/2024 8:55:00 AM
Excellent Vijay. I felt myself swaying through time, like a dance through your poem :)
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Date: 3/11/2024 6:28:00 AM
Much appreciate my friend. Many thanks, Heidi.
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