Noticing

In wonderment I walk with the day billows blowing noticing not, a beginning nor an end lost in the mist of the rain I pause at the crosswalks filled with children on their way not knowing life from a game smiles yield, flowery umbrellas holding the rain and a world at bay glistened eyes overcome and I see their mothers dreams, heartfelt nights tireless songs of glee intrepidity the will amid the worry cars turning left moving right no wrong in sight the beginning to an end they're at their end I see youth in their eyes glazing over moments years/tears it's not the end I greet them noticing all that beauty bellowing silently from within

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Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/6/2020 1:08:00 PM

Only sensitive souls will notice youth in the eyes across years of tears..If only in life we could be like those children keeping the rain at bay..Not the fresh rain but the dirty rain..If only..maybe then..none will be lost. Love this poem T.S .Glad I got to read it.

Paris-Maree Boreham

Date: 10/2/2020 12:08:00 PM

You are a very observant soul, great poetry !

John Hamilton

Date: 12/4/2019 9:31:00 PM

I see I'm late to the party, congrats on POTD, looking forward to reading more of you!

Line Gauthier

Date: 11/14/2019 10:35:00 AM

Lovely first posting. Welcome to PoetrySoup, TS.

Brooklyn Cruz

Date: 10/27/2019 9:22:00 PM

absolutely gorgeous--I'm beyond impressed...

Hello There

Date: 10/18/2019 11:23:00 PM

I could almost cry for what seems a true understanding on your part of all that is painted on a mother's face and contained within her eyes... beautifully penned, TS Poetry.

Lady Labyrinth

Date: 10/13/2019 2:19:00 PM

beautiful. sad. Life. x

Marilyn Williams

Date: 10/11/2019 1:21:00 PM

I love this. Many fail to notice. Great write! And, congrats on your Feature.

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/11/2019 6:59:00 AM

Sad the ways of mortal man. Soft blinded by papers green. His time but a brief span. Great beauty too oft unseen. Yet life offers its gifts. The Joy's of sweet love. Light and hope that uplifts. Treasure cast from above. Superb first poem you have e given us. A fav, a great POTD.

Eve Roper

Date: 10/9/2019 9:47:00 PM

Beautiful write my friend, Tim, always the best.. Congratulations on POTD Hugs

Line Gauthier

Date: 10/8/2019 7:07:00 AM

Congrats on your POTD, TS.

Mark Toney

Date: 10/6/2019 9:35:00 PM

An uplifting poem with a positive message. Brilliant! Congratulations on Poem of the Day! ~Mark

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2019 8:46:00 PM

very beautiful. I had to check out the first post made and wow, it's a potd!! Congratulations.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/6/2019 2:15:00 PM

- Beautifully poem, TS :) - Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d. - // Anne-Lise :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 10/6/2019 12:33:00 PM

Wow! First poem posted -- Kaboom! Poem of the Day! That may just be a first. Congratulations are certainly in order for a wonderful, wondrous write! Best wishes, Gershon

Dean Wood

Date: 10/4/2019 8:25:00 AM

"not knowing life from a game" This is wonderful poetry TS. Beautifyl at so many levels. I have noticed some of these things myself. So well done! Congratulations!

Constance La France

Date: 10/3/2019 11:26:00 PM

Congratulations on POTD, enjoy the honor!

Panagiota Romios

Date: 10/3/2019 10:21:00 PM

Yaaaa, congratulations.TS... Perfect poetry.... Panagiota xxx

Brandy Nicole

Date: 10/3/2019 4:25:00 PM

"noticing all that beauty, lost in the mist of the rain" Yes, indeed. These two thoughts together, make my heart smile. Your entire poem is captivating. Congratulations TS Poetry, on Poem of the Day. :) Brandy

Vegter Papyrus

Date: 10/3/2019 3:32:00 PM

This deserves an applause. Masterful

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/3/2019 1:07:00 PM

This is fantastic! Congratulations on your deserving POTD honor. Aloha : )

Debra Squyres

Date: 10/3/2019 10:09:00 AM

You have written this with a discerning eye... seeing the images and looking beyond what the eye sees. Beautifully done !! Well deserved poem of the day poetry !!

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 10/3/2019 9:57:00 AM

Flowery umbrellas holding the rain and a world at bay - The will amid the worry.... So many good lines. Congratulations!

Winged Warrior

Date: 10/3/2019 8:21:00 AM

We're noticing!... Absolutely magnificent poetry...Congrats!! on POTD!! TS...^WW^ :o)

Heidi Sands

Date: 10/3/2019 8:17:00 AM

Congratulations for POTD :)