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How distant do you feel from our ideal life,
and how hard are you willing to go, to get there?
You’ve got to pull a big swing sometimes, to get there, you know?
You’ll flourish in the aftermath.
What I’m carrying is joy.

Notes for an American student in Paris..

Be less intense
tone it down
pullback.

Enough scrappiness, hustle,
and intensity on repeat.

Sure, honesty is sanity,
but give them a better version
some ‘church girl’ energy, maybe.
Win ‘em with winsome

Don’t welcome them, immediately, into your tense, inner world.
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Songs for this:
Oh Honey! (I Love You) by Peach Tree Rascals
Nothing Breaks Like a Heart (feat. Miley Cyrus) by Mark Ronson
Tear Off Your Own Head (It's A Doll Revolution) by The Bangles
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DiMino Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 8:52 PM
Sounds like sound advice. Best of luck on your exploring journey. Blessings.
Vionet Avatar
August 12, 2025 at 4:37 AM
Thanks, Joe =]
Fallica Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 5:25 PM
<3 . Damn girl! That's like Charles Bukowski, except with a SMILE! :-) . . . . Love the pix!
Fallica Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 10:00 PM
YouTube Charles Bukowski, 'Go All The Way'. He's stronger heard instead of read.
Vionet Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 7:40 PM
I’ve never heard of Bukowski - I’m researching him..
Conn Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 4:17 PM
… From The Underground?
Vionet Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 7:57 PM
My classes are about 3.5 miles from home, so I was timing the métro routes (2 hops, 27 minutes). Funny how you don't care how long things take when you're on vacation but RL requires a little more planning. =]
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