Daver Austin Poet Tanka

Not Yet (Triple Tanka)

squirrels run wild I see
it's been so long coming
as though they're set free
the first faint sense of spring air
sewn in March mistakenly

hear how they chatter
hear how they scold each other
who knows the matter?
could be released energy
that long winter chill set free

so i'll out of doors
i've put winter's coat away
and yet I shiver
such a bright sunny day    i've
thought it spring mistakenly

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Andrea Dietrich July 31, 2013 at 7:58 AM revisiting a cute oldie. I'm noticing i have already revisited nearly all your poems. haha!! I hope you are doing well today, my friend. Luv, Andrea

Poet Destroyer A December 8, 2012 at 10:29 PM aweee.. chucks... wishing for spring already... love the image you are waiting for always~ LINDA

Andrea Dietrich November 30, 2011 at 10:35 PM I like this kind of day, DAver!!Just revisiting one from long ago. I truly think I have seen every last one of your poems here!

Andrea Dietrich November 7, 2010 at 7:20 PM AHA, one i did not see yet. a great treat for me! You sure do love your squirrels!! Luv, Andrea

April 3, 2009 at 1:23 PM Boy, March roared out this year for us, dumping another 10 inches of snow before it left. Sounds like a better scene in this poem. Enjoyed the lighthearted feel of this one. Hope spring arrives soon. Thank you for your kind words regarding my poem. Have a nice day. Karen

Elaine George April 2, 2009 at 12:51 AM Now!!!! that's what I call BRILLIANT! A triple tanka! I am lucky to wirte a single one. Lainie

Trudy Diane Rider April 1, 2009 at 8:39 AM Springtime in the Rockies is no different, warm and sunny in the AM and snowing by lunch! Great threesome there! ~Trudy~

Carolyn Devonshire March 28, 2009 at 10:57 AM Still waiting for your help with my squirrel problem, Daver. LOL

Nola Perez March 25, 2009 at 11:10 AM Oh, Oh - triple tanka, I meant.

Nola Perez March 25, 2009 at 11:08 AM Absolutely love "Not Yet." I almost thought I wrote it, or, better said, wish I had. Double tanka, did say? I say singular rhythm, singular style, all those great S's. Thank you commenting on just aboutall my poems. Between you and Stacey, I feel so validated, it really doesn't matter who else reads, though I love it when they do, Jeez, we write because we have to, but also to be read

Carolyn Devonshire March 24, 2009 at 4:16 PM Love the image of the squirrels controlling the outdoor world, Daver. Wish you could come to my house and chase away the squirrels that climb up the screen around my backyard pool. Lying there, you look up and see them over your head. They are cuter when you're looking down at them. GREAT poem! Love, Carolyn

Arany P. March 24, 2009 at 10:51 AM Daver... it is Arany! my first name belongs to my father... and thank you for your kind thoughts on my write! ~ Arany

Arany P. March 24, 2009 at 5:00 AM haha... well i am enjoying a hot summer day here where i live.. we don't really have colourful springs in the middle-east... this tanka x3 is really cute and really clever... ~ Arany

Sharon Winter March 23, 2009 at 2:27 PM Me too, me too! I thought it would be not freezing and opened my door and yikes, forget it. I've got squirrels galore here too! Soon, soon. I'm freezing as I write this : ) Awesome triple dipper! Love, Shar

Barbara Gorelick March 23, 2009 at 9:42 AM Good work Daver..this happened to be yesterday..had to go back and get a coat...smile. BG

Carrie Richards March 23, 2009 at 7:18 AM Sounds like right out my window. Spring looks like it's here...but the chill makes me remember that winter hasn't yet taken it's final goodbye bow! ~ Nice one, Daver!! ~ love, Carrie

Christopher Higgins March 23, 2009 at 6:08 AM wonderfully writing with this piece..love the title..the ending is superb..I have put mine away also..I ain't taking it back out...LOL