Not Squared Away

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Photo by US Navy WestPack Album—Gorelick 2nd top right
“Not Squared-Away” Crawling and sliding through slimy debris Knees scraped raw on the gritty hanger bay We’re sailors on the carrier Coral Sea Crossing the equator this bright April day Our shellback ordeal-just good-natured hazing A navy tradition; great nautical fun Like pagons, it’s old King Neptune we’re praising Great Zeus, let this filthy business be done! Now shellbacks! We’ve made it unscathed, more or less We toss our soiled clothes out to the ocean breeze But I find myself in one hell of a mess For I left my wallet in my dungarees! Now drifting away is my navy ID A grave offense if it’s lost or misplaced It will no doubt be captain’s mast for me Where I’ll be demoted! Denounced! Disgraced! I stand at attention, rigid and straight The captain shouts: You are not squared-away! Sweating bullets, I ponder my dire fate I’ll surely be thrown in the brig today A lost ID at sea is close to a crime A gross dereliction, stupid but rare On just bread and water I will do my time As I topple down the steps to despair In solemn dread I now report to the chief With a churning stomach and anguished mind But now all fear lifts and I sigh in relief As he snaps: Get to work; were falling behind Written 9/11/22

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Date: 10/20/2022 6:34:00 AM
Lovely story Robert. Well done! :)
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Date: 9/13/2022 10:46:00 PM
Now your Poetry serves, as your ID. Robert. Brilliant, yes true life before fiction any day. Love this, thank you for posting, for here in far away Australia a gleeful smile. Harry
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Date: 9/13/2022 10:51:00 AM
Your navy experience made quite an interesting story, Robert. Your writing is so excellent that your dread and anxiety, followed by your vast relief, could be felt. Hope your day is a good one, Evelyn :)
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Date: 9/13/2022 2:23:00 AM
Robert I can feel your anxious doom through your words and the end made it so nice to hear everything worked out. I know the feeling of misplacing something extremely important. Thank you for your service and sharing this event. I'm sorry you had to relive it as you wrote it. It is one of those days in your life that you will never forget... Another excellent performance by you. At ease my friend you can rest now... God bless you...
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Date: 9/12/2022 7:58:00 PM
Must be the guy with the beard. Right?! :) gw
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Date: 9/12/2022 1:27:00 PM
I love the photo, Robert-a handsome addition to the story! So gald it worked out in the end with not even a slap on the wrist. Interesting look into the life aboard! Thank you for your service! At ease sailor!
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Robert Gorelick
Date: 9/12/2022 1:52:00 PM
Welcome aboard! We ship out at 0600!
Date: 9/11/2022 10:51:00 PM
Not easy to retrieve your belongings. Probably they sunk.
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Robert Gorelick
Date: 9/12/2022 1:50:00 PM
Throw your dirty clothes in the ocean, and they'll wash ashore. By the way, the sailor above with the shades on, told me the joke!
Date: 9/11/2022 9:10:00 PM
Oh my! So, what happened??? I'm left hanging. Were you ever punished for losing your ID? Good luck in the contest, Robert.
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Date: 9/12/2022 1:47:00 PM
No although the captain phoned my chief ordering 10 hrs of EMI (extra military instruction) my chief told me to forget about it, we have too much work to do. As a photographer's mate, we made all the sailors ID's! Robert
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