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Tell me, Old Man Moon, what's this dance - this soft Tango you spun upon the stream? I wonder, did you care to ask its favor? Did you think to consider its courses, or did you surmise by its shapely form that it would be taken by your gleam? True enough, you dazzle its countenance - numberless silver stars spin like Heaven ... bursting, dying in an instant, replaced, adorning its breast in diamonds, rare. But perhaps it doesn't abide your gifts, perhaps it holds secrets best left dim ... and you waltz with an unwilling partner. For this stream's reach is boundless, and this very day, far up its lengths, there was a tragedy, lives lost in number ... now it carries on its back, that horror - broken forms not meant for shimmer, or the dazzling beauty of your sway ... staring eyes no longer apt, moon OR sun, to shine. Submitted on June 19, 2020 To the "Gifts" Poetry Contest Anthony Biaanco, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 6/22/2020 8:47:00 AM
Every time I read an old poem of yours in a contest, I feel glad you wrote it. Your words are always an enchanting, haunting, mysterious experience for me. Congratulations on your win Greg :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:51:00 PM
What a wonderful comment, Aditi, so heartfelt and genuine ... you always bring a smile to my face. Blessings, Dear Poet! :o) <3
Date: 6/22/2020 5:37:00 AM
Hello sir, Lovely write.:-) I wonder why this poem is not on top this time.But anyways.. Congratulations for your placement.Keep writing.:-) Take care.Warm regards~Deepa
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:50:00 PM
Oh, thank you so much, Deepa - I guess it comes down to what the judge is looking for, and what they personally find the most worthwhile or pleasing ... and this is rather dark. These wonderful comments are my trophy - blessings, friend! :o)
Date: 6/22/2020 5:12:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this, and for constantly sharing your poetry gift. God bless you.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:48:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Beata, and I thank you so much for taking the time! Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 6/21/2020 10:56:00 PM
Beautiful and haunting imagery of a tragedy on the water that looks so lovely on the surface. An allegory for so many sad people wearing a smile. Intriguing poetry, my friend. Congrats on your win ~ John
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:47:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, John, I'm happy you found this one worthwhile, my friend! :o)
Date: 6/21/2020 10:34:00 AM
Nicely done, Greg, I love your entry and ending with great imagery through out. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/22/2020 12:47:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Eve, I'm so pleased you liked it, Friend! :o) <3
Date: 4/10/2019 6:02:00 AM
Wow, this poem has a surprising ending and intriguing much contemplation Greg. I hope she will love it. ; ) xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/25/2019 1:27:00 PM
I guess it wasn't what she was looking for, but your lovely comment will be my award, Connie - blessings! :-) <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/10/2019 8:10:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Connie, I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I love to weave surprises and ambiguity within the stanzas, and go in unexpected directions. Blessings! :-) <3

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