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No Brakes At Forty

No Brakes At Forty No Brakes at forty, I got to stop. It starts to rain and I'm on the freeway. I see a car that got too close, but I can't stop. I push the brake, but it don't work. I start to panic, what can I do? I thought I knew, but my brakes won't come through. I see a car that's up ahead - I thought OH no , if I hit it - I'm dead. I looked behind, I looked around. I see an exit, I turn the wheel and out I go. Believe it or not - but I was now going slow. I knew then that I was safe. I now knew that one way or another my car would stop... 06/08/2014 By Lucilla M. Carrillo. Note: Sometime back I was challenge to write a poem with just the title. This is what I came up with....

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Paul Callus

Date: 6/13/2014 3:01:00 PM

I see this in a different light. The travelling car is our life on the move....sometimes things go wrong, but if we do not panic God will show us an escape route. Faith could well be our safety net! Take care, Lucilla. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/9/2014 7:12:00 PM

Dear Lucilla, this is quite a creative car trip on which your imagination embarked. You responded to the challenge very well! (Just glad this didn't really happen; there are so many accidents in my area.) Love, Carolyn

Lucilla Carrillo
Date: 6/9/2014 7:36:00 PM

Thank you so much. It was a challenge and that was what I came up with.

Justin Bordner

Date: 6/9/2014 1:35:00 PM

Nothing quite like near death experiences while driving a car, I've had several, they are great moments, if you survive. Suspensful write Lucilla. J.A.B.

Lucilla Carrillo
Date: 6/9/2014 7:20:00 PM

Thank you for reading. I had quiet a bit of those death experiences.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/9/2014 1:35:00 PM

- Luckily it went well .... a little different poems from you my dear friend Lucilla - enjoyed reading it ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Lucilla Carrillo
Date: 6/9/2014 7:34:00 PM

I just wanted to try something different this time.

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 6/9/2014 1:52:00 AM

Clever write. Excellent. Enjoyed. Tfs

Lucilla Carrillo
Date: 6/9/2014 7:17:00 PM

Thank you Ravi.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/8/2014 9:45:00 PM

Wonderful Lucilla....I used to have a Mustang pre kids that I would get up to over 120mph....now I take the train..lol much safer...hugs Tim

Lucilla Carrillo
Date: 6/8/2014 9:58:00 PM

Tim; every time I read a poem of yours - It brings me memories from Chicago. From all the cars I had - my favorite was a Mustang. Keep riding the train so you can be safe. Take care and God bless you.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/8/2014 7:40:00 PM

I love breaking the law...LOL, Lucy, thank you for the reply.. Linda

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/8/2014 7:11:00 PM

Haha this is me, I panic, just thinking of the age. But, I know you are talking of the speed limt.. LOL.. I can't stand going 40 at all, unless I'm in town and I have toooooo... enjoyed this...Linda

Lucilla Carrillo
Date: 6/8/2014 7:33:00 PM

You should not panic - it's nothing.at that age you start having a different outlook on life. About the speed limit I would like to go 80 miles an hour. If I didn't break the law.