Nine Seventeen

Huddled in Burton's doorway, head down,
the windblown rain at almost forty five degrees
soaking me from the knees downwards.
Reflecting on the paving, the red, amber and green
from the traffic lights heralded a wave of white from passing headlights,
like theatre curtains opening.
And centre stage stood I.
The clock at Samuel's jeweller said nine seventeen.
I thought I blended in well- the tailor's dummies in the windows
either side of me, equally well dressed, stared vacantly
into a dark alien world. I envied them.
They were dry.
And not waiting on a first date.
A quick glance up.
The clock said nine seventeen.
They say that time slows down when you're idle, or impatient,
and I was starting to bow to this unproven scientific truth.
Two pretty girls strode past beneath a mangled umbrella,
one briefly threw a smile my way, almost lost in a giggle.
I counted my twentieth chorus of red, amber and green.
It was nine seventeen.

She said she'd be here for nine. I looked at my watch.
Ten O'clock.
The bells of the Guildhall and the Cathedral smugly agreed,
H. Samuel had been lying all along.
The rain had stopped. I stepped out into the throng of couples,
dressed in my singleness, as the girls with the broken umbrella,
now discarded, approached.
No giggles- she gave the same smile, but her eyes knew my plight,
then she shrugged.
I found a bar and sat in damp trousers with a beer, and watched the big screen
to take my mind off a wasted evening.
The rugby was just finishing.
God does have a sense of humour,
England beating France-
Seventeen points to nine.

25th June 2018
For contest 'nine seventeen', sponsor John Lawless
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Gentry Avatar
July 17, 2018 at 7:41 AM
Congratulations on your win. Could feel this. Well done!
Roper Avatar
July 14, 2018 at 10:39 AM
Congratulations on your awesome win. Hugs Eve
Wigley Avatar
July 15, 2018 at 1:54 AM
Thanks, Eve, much appreciated. Viv x
Fisher Avatar
July 14, 2018 at 8:35 AM
Congratulations! A great poem. I could feel his disappointment. I really liked the creative last line as well.
Wigley Avatar
July 15, 2018 at 1:54 AM
Thanks Haley, an autobiographical piece, but I have since dried out :). Viv x
Inman Avatar
July 14, 2018 at 7:40 AM
Remembered this as soon as I started reading it. Great write Viv.
Wigley Avatar
July 15, 2018 at 1:55 AM
Thanks James, nice to see people enjoyed it. Regards, Viv
Lawless Avatar
July 14, 2018 at 7:19 AM
...I found a bar and sat in damp trousers...and that was the high point of the evening. Great write Viv. Love and rugby do have their similarities. Thanks for participating in the contest
Wigley Avatar
July 15, 2018 at 1:55 AM
Thanks John, enjoyed the challenge. Regards, Viv
Delaney Avatar
July 3, 2018 at 8:49 PM
Hi Viv: I enjoyed it the whole way through. You are a master storyteller and your good humor always shows through. You brought the scene to life and i feel it will ace yhe contest. Hugs, SuZ
Inman Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 1:40 PM
You brought back sad and embarrassing moments in my own life Viv. I hope this was as bad as it got for you, mine were sooooo much worse.
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June 26, 2018 at 10:04 PM
Very interesting poem Viv, but it's not like you - choosing a girl over rugby. She probably stayed home to watch the rugby - thanks Mate - Lindsay
Wigley Avatar
June 27, 2018 at 1:13 AM
Yeah, most probably. A shame though, it was back in 2011 and I had less wrinkles :( . Thanks for dropping by, Lindsay. Regards, Viv
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June 25, 2018 at 6:47 PM
I really enjoyed your poem, Viv. There's some veiled humor there in the images - I love especially "I envied them. They were dry". Fantastic.
Wigley Avatar
June 27, 2018 at 1:13 AM
Thanks, Agnes, I try to keep a vein of humour running through the sour bits of life x
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 25, 2018 at 3:55 PM
A fantastic naritive on what it feels like to be stood up. Your descriptive imagery takes the reader right along with you. Really excellent free verse which reveals you are as brilliant at free verse as you are at rhyme! I've been recouping from knee surgery so I have missed a lot of your poetry. ; )
Wigley Avatar
June 27, 2018 at 1:14 AM
Thanks Connie, very kind. I've missed you too- glad you're on the mend, me, I'm still round the bend x
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June 25, 2018 at 8:23 AM
This is beyond good. I love the feel of it. The details brought it to life.
Wigley Avatar
June 27, 2018 at 1:14 AM
Thanks Richard, yes, the devil is in the detail, methinks. Regards, Viv
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June 25, 2018 at 7:38 AM
09:17 great closing, ends with a positive note. Regards...a friend from India.
Wigley Avatar
June 27, 2018 at 1:15 AM
Thanks Rajat, glad you enjoyed it. regards, Viv
Man Avatar
June 25, 2018 at 5:26 AM
Vic.. I loved reading your poem over a cup of hot coffee this morning. Your write is interesting and it was a joy to read!
Wigley Avatar
June 27, 2018 at 1:15 AM
Thanks Lyric, glad it floated your boat. Regards, Viv
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June 25, 2018 at 1:57 AM
Enjoyed this Viv, look on the bright side England won . Good luck. Tom
Wigley Avatar
June 27, 2018 at 1:16 AM
Indeedy, Tom. Onwards and upwards! regards, Viv
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