Nine Seventeen

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Huddled in Burton's doorway, head down,
the windblown rain at almost forty five degrees
soaking me from the knees downwards.
Reflecting on the paving, the red, amber and green
from the traffic lights heralded a wave of white from passing headlights,
like theatre curtains opening.
And centre stage stood I.
The clock at Samuel's jeweller said nine seventeen.
I thought I blended in well- the tailor's dummies in the windows
either side of me, equally well dressed, stared vacantly
into a dark alien world. I envied them.
They were dry.
And not waiting on a first date.
A quick glance up.
The clock said nine seventeen.
They say that time slows down when you're idle, or impatient,
and I was starting to bow to this unproven scientific truth.
Two pretty girls strode past beneath a mangled umbrella,
one briefly threw a smile my way, almost lost in a giggle.
I counted my twentieth chorus of red, amber and green.
It was nine seventeen.

She said she'd be here for nine. I looked at my watch.
Ten O'clock.
The bells of the Guildhall and the Cathedral smugly agreed,
H. Samuel had been lying all along.
The rain had stopped. I stepped out into the throng of couples,
dressed in my singleness, as the girls with the broken umbrella,
now discarded, approached.
No giggles- she gave the same smile, but her eyes knew my plight,
then she shrugged.
I found a bar and sat in damp trousers with a beer, and watched the big screen
to take my mind off a wasted evening.
The rugby was just finishing.
God does have a sense of humour,
England beating France-
Seventeen points to nine.

25th June 2018
For contest 'nine seventeen', sponsor John Lawless

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 7/17/2018 7:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Could feel this. Well done!
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Date: 7/14/2018 10:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your awesome win. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/15/2018 1:54:00 AM
Thanks, Eve, much appreciated. Viv x
Date: 7/14/2018 8:35:00 AM
Congratulations! A great poem. I could feel his disappointment. I really liked the creative last line as well.
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Date: 7/15/2018 1:54:00 AM
Thanks Haley, an autobiographical piece, but I have since dried out :). Viv x
Date: 7/14/2018 7:40:00 AM
Remembered this as soon as I started reading it. Great write Viv.
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Date: 7/15/2018 1:55:00 AM
Thanks James, nice to see people enjoyed it. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/14/2018 7:19:00 AM
...I found a bar and sat in damp trousers...and that was the high point of the evening. Great write Viv. Love and rugby do have their similarities. Thanks for participating in the contest
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Date: 7/15/2018 1:55:00 AM
Thanks John, enjoyed the challenge. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/3/2018 8:49:00 PM
Hi Viv: I enjoyed it the whole way through. You are a master storyteller and your good humor always shows through. You brought the scene to life and i feel it will ace yhe contest. Hugs, SuZ
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:40:00 PM
You brought back sad and embarrassing moments in my own life Viv. I hope this was as bad as it got for you, mine were sooooo much worse.
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Date: 6/26/2018 10:04:00 PM
Very interesting poem Viv, but it's not like you - choosing a girl over rugby. She probably stayed home to watch the rugby - thanks Mate - Lindsay
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Date: 6/27/2018 1:13:00 AM
Yeah, most probably. A shame though, it was back in 2011 and I had less wrinkles :( . Thanks for dropping by, Lindsay. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/25/2018 6:47:00 PM
I really enjoyed your poem, Viv. There's some veiled humor there in the images - I love especially "I envied them. They were dry". Fantastic.
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Date: 6/27/2018 1:13:00 AM
Thanks, Agnes, I try to keep a vein of humour running through the sour bits of life x
Date: 6/25/2018 3:55:00 PM
A fantastic naritive on what it feels like to be stood up. Your descriptive imagery takes the reader right along with you. Really excellent free verse which reveals you are as brilliant at free verse as you are at rhyme! I've been recouping from knee surgery so I have missed a lot of your poetry. ; )
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Date: 6/27/2018 1:14:00 AM
Thanks Connie, very kind. I've missed you too- glad you're on the mend, me, I'm still round the bend x
Date: 6/25/2018 8:23:00 AM
This is beyond good. I love the feel of it. The details brought it to life.
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Date: 6/27/2018 1:14:00 AM
Thanks Richard, yes, the devil is in the detail, methinks. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/25/2018 7:38:00 AM
09:17 great closing, ends with a positive note. Regards...a friend from India.
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Date: 6/27/2018 1:15:00 AM
Thanks Rajat, glad you enjoyed it. regards, Viv
Date: 6/25/2018 5:26:00 AM
Vic.. I loved reading your poem over a cup of hot coffee this morning. Your write is interesting and it was a joy to read!
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Date: 6/27/2018 1:15:00 AM
Thanks Lyric, glad it floated your boat. Regards, Viv
Date: 6/25/2018 1:57:00 AM
Enjoyed this Viv, look on the bright side England won . Good luck. Tom
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Date: 6/27/2018 1:16:00 AM
Indeedy, Tom. Onwards and upwards! regards, Viv
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