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Nine-Eleven

far across country smoke drifts..cries reverberate sitting mesmerized bewildered, mutely frightened taste word...terrorist No. 1 in Carolyn's contest.

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Gwendolen Song

Date: 9/15/2011 5:36:00 PM

Congrats, Carol...your last line drew an image of so much dust in the air that you couldn't avoid getting it in your mouth...hence, taste terrorist. Very concise wording...great tanka! Gwendolen

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 9/15/2011 5:25:00 PM

Congraonderful piece.. always Michaelts to Joyce on this w

Jack Horne

Date: 9/15/2011 3:48:00 PM

Awesome write. Many congratulations to you, Joyce : )

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 9/15/2011 1:18:00 PM

i think you really captured the moment and with this one joyce. we were all bewildered for sure. i love the ending too - tasting the word - simply brilliant. congrats on your win :)

Bob Quigley

Date: 9/15/2011 11:00:00 AM

Congratulations on your 1ts place win Joyce. "far across country" is so appropriate.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/15/2011 10:10:00 AM

Congrats on your win in Carolyn's fine contest..Sara

Caryl Ramsdale

Date: 9/15/2011 3:00:00 AM

My favorite line "taste word...terrorist". We as a country were exposed as never before. Outstanding combination of words my friend. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Cr

Lee Ramage

Date: 9/15/2011 12:04:00 AM

Excellent, just wish we didn't have to the know the word. Love Lee

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/15/2011 12:02:00 AM

top of the heap, joyce..sunniest congrats on your most special win :) huggs

Margaret Foster

Date: 9/14/2011 9:50:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Joyce. Not a lot of words but saying so much. well done. Marg

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 9/14/2011 8:29:00 PM

Congratulations on your top win, dear Joyce! Best, iolanda

Kim Merryman

Date: 9/14/2011 8:19:00 PM

Congrats on your 1st place win, Joyce! Kim

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/14/2011 8:10:00 PM

Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carolyn, Joyce

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/14/2011 4:54:00 PM

That new word, which now seems too commonplace...such an ugly word it is. Excellent entry to Carolyn's contest, Joyce! Congratulations

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/14/2011 3:37:00 PM

Congrats Joyce on a fantastic first place win ...

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/14/2011 2:45:00 PM

yes our turn to reap...Congrad's light & love

David Williams

Date: 9/14/2011 2:45:00 PM

hey Joyce congrats on your win, all entries were sensitively done..David

John Freeman

Date: 9/14/2011 2:37:00 PM

I wish I could say beautiful, Joyce, but the scene was anything but beautiful. However, a quite worthy Tanka was to rank first place. Congratulations Joyce. Agape, Moses

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/14/2011 2:05:00 PM

Congratulations on your well deserved win Joyce. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/14/2011 1:30:00 PM

Joyce, your poem captured all of the feelings from that moment -- bewilderment, mesmerized, crying. Indeed the "smoke" or impact drift far across the country. Outstanding tanka! Congratulations on your first-place win. Love, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/9/2011 11:42:00 PM

a very nasty word it was to taste too. One we had not thought much about before that fated time!