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night’s serenade hiku - edited

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For Brian Strand's '1392' Poetry Contest

A breathtaking cosmic dance of golden and blue stars illuminating the vast expanse of the night sky with a mesmerizing nebula backdrop.

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Sorry, I had missed a letter in one word. dancing on stars s g on the moon . . . w n i n g i the night plays on

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Paige Hind

Date: 6/24/2025 6:13:00 PM

Love that ending, Andrea. Very pretty!!

Hiya Sharma

Date: 6/24/2025 5:12:00 AM

Wow!! What a creative poem this is, sweet Andrea, I absolutely love how you’ve shaped this hiku that seems to be swinging with magic, visually as well. It feels like a truly joyful night, playing with cosmic entities and being charmed by the celestial beauty of the universe…I hope it will do well in the contest, sending many best wishes and light always. A fave for me!

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/24/2025 10:57:00 AM

Much appreciated, Hiya

Oliver Mckeithan

Date: 6/24/2025 12:02:00 AM

Like the shape and the theme Andrea. The swinging on the moon part ties in well with the girl on the swing

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 6/23/2025 3:29:00 PM

Hello Andrea, This is romantic. i enjoyed this poem. Hugs. /Darlene/

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/23/2025 2:19:00 PM

Wow!! Must have been a wonderful night. LOL..Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Sara K

Jaymee Thomas

Date: 6/23/2025 1:57:00 PM

I just love this. I used to say I didn't like shape poetry but after reading yours and David K.'s, I may have to retire that phrase--and try one myself :) I especially like that the swoop with the extended tail looks also a bit like a scythe, making it read slightly ominous / ironic if you squint. Great work.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/24/2025 10:57:00 AM

it's cool that you saw more in it than I did. You are awesome, Jaymee.

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 4:34:00 AM

LOL - No, I got that it was intended to be a swing, but I read and reread - especially smaller poems to understand the mechanics, and in doing so, it started to read differently, a little haunting when I realized the shapes were so similar. I loved it and definitely thought the multiple, implied tones were intentional :)

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/23/2025 2:09:00 PM

Oh my, you didn't realize it was a swing? hahaha. Oh well, I am still glad you liked it!!

Howard Kerr

Date: 6/23/2025 12:20:00 PM

Andrea, Exquisite imagery, beguiling shape and inspired narrative. Best of luck Howard

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/23/2025 2:09:00 PM

thanks, Howard