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Night - a Pantoum Lullaby

Night spreads its magic cloak of midnight blue
across the sky.  Serenity slips down.
I sing this pantoum lullaby for you
as stars, like sequins, sparkle all around.

Across the sky, serenity slips down
beneath moon’s watchful gaze and steady glow.
As stars like sequins sparkle all around,
drift into Dreamland with the lyrics’ flow.

Beneath moon’s watchful gaze and steady glow,
I sing each line and then a second time!
Drift into Dreamland with the lyrics’ flow.
How restful is sweet rhythm and its rhyme.

I sing each line and then a second time
at end of day when sky holds poetry.
How restful is sweet rhythm and its rhyme.
In repetition lies security.

At end of day when sky holds poetry,
I sing this pantoum lullaby for you.
In repetition lies security.
Night spreads its magic cloak of midnight blue.

written 3/25/16
For Caren Krutsinger's Proud Pantoum Poetry Contest
Submitted now for Mark Toney's 
 the '2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 18' Poetry Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Ashley Avatar
November 9, 2022 at 7:18 AM
A beautifully composed pantoum! Lovely imagery with restful sweet rhythm and rhyme. Soothing splendor! Congratulations, dear Andrea, for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Radice Avatar
November 3, 2022 at 2:03 PM
"How restful is sweet rhythm and its rhyme." For me this sums up your contest winning poem Andrea. Congratulations. Cheers - Gary
Horsman Avatar
November 2, 2022 at 5:48 PM
Wow Andrea, not seen this gem before. Excellent entry and winner so deserved, in Mark's marathon, and congratulation on POTD 2016.
Watt Avatar
November 2, 2022 at 12:59 PM
"How restful is sweet rhythm and its rhyme", so true! How smooth and seamless your pantoum is, dear friend. A challenging form to get just right, but you have done so here. Your nighttime imagery is so tranquil too. I will fall asleep tonight imagining poetry being sung in a soothing voice. Congratulations for your podium win in the marathon ~ John
Toney Avatar
November 2, 2022 at 12:54 PM
Andrea, such a dreamy pantoum lullaby. My favorite lines: "How restful is sweet rhythm and its rhyme," "at end of day when sky holds poetry," and "In repetition lies security." Congratulations on your second-place, podium finish on Mile 18 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 19 has already started.
Roper Avatar
February 28, 2021 at 12:47 PM
Great Rhyming Pantoum , Andrea. Congratulations on your win . Hugs Eve
Robinson Jr. Avatar
June 19, 2017 at 2:04 PM
Sweet lullaby Pantoum, Andrea. This was done so gracefully and tastefully. A nighttime enchanting poem. Pure poetry. Love and smiles always.
Smith Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 8:19 PM
Great pantoum Andrea, congratulations...
Grasso Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 4:50 PM
Congratulations on the win, Andrea. ...Fran
U.D Palawon  Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 9:57 AM
You've painted such a beautiful pic of the night with words. I like it. Congrats!
Kimathi Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 3:49 AM
The imagery of your piece is really fragrant to the soul and mind!! Congrats Andrea, for your top placement in the contest!! ;-)
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 2:10 AM
You did really well in this contest Andrea. This form is too much of a challenge for me. My entry got an N/A. Mybe it was a bit too serene lol. Congratulations on your high placement Andrea. Very deserved! ; )
Misra Avatar
June 14, 2016 at 12:39 AM
Andrea, that was a beautiful and smart poem - sheer genius how you also explained the pantoun form along with the lullabiness of the nocturnal theme. Congrats on your win in the contest. ~karam~
Roberts Avatar
June 13, 2016 at 11:09 PM
Congratulations Andrea.......Seren
Negron Flores Avatar
June 13, 2016 at 8:08 PM
Congratulations Andrea on the placement of the contest
Sefunmi Avatar
April 8, 2016 at 1:56 PM
Lovely write. I just hope that I will master this form one day.
Hicks Avatar
April 7, 2016 at 8:26 PM
Back again with congrats, Andrea. I do love how you managed to glorify the form itself with your creative theme choice. One of these days I'll try and write one of these with a consistent rhyme scheme and see if I can do it!
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 7, 2016 at 1:40 PM
At end of day when sky holds poetry...love that line because it captures that inspiratuation most poets are gifted with as evening becomes night and the moon and the stars romance us. Congratulations on your wonderful deserving firrst place win Andrea! # 7 ; )
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 7, 2016 at 1:40 PM
At end of day when sky holds poetry...love that line because it captures that inspiratuation most poets are gifted with as evening becomes night and the moon and the stars romance us. Congratulations on your wonderful deserving firrst place win Andrea! # 7 ; )
A   Avatar
April 6, 2016 at 9:53 PM
Andrea, Congrats on your "Pantoum --Poet's Choice Win." ~LINDA~
Delaney Avatar
April 6, 2016 at 8:32 PM
Congrats Andrea: Anwonderful pantoum. I love the line, "At end of day when sky holds poetry." Love, SuZ
Kendrick Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 4:15 PM
Congrats on your wining work..Sara
Gupta Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 10:17 AM
Enjoyed reading this melodious poem...
A. Sharma Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 4:50 AM
Great work Andrea.. no wonder top podium.. big congrats!
Raina Avatar
April 4, 2016 at 11:00 PM
Congratulations on your win!
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