Neytiri

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"Oel ngati kameie"

Oh, my
Sweetness
If only you'd see me
With eyes of this aching essence
What scrumptious trouble we could find ourselves
In the weeping glow of the sacred tree
Drops of the mad moon, trickling
From your lips ... to mine
Such febrile fun
Delicious and ...
Dark.





~ 1st Place ~  in the "Mid December Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/16/2018 2:10:00 PM

Always a thought-provoking write from you, Greg. The "weeping glow of the sacred tree" certainly ties in with the message from Avatar and the "febrile fun" evokes such a lively erotic image. Enjoyed, my friend. Congratulations on your win in Brian's contest! Best wishes, Carolyn

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2018 6:27:00 AM

Oh, what a wonderful comment, Carolyn, and you mentioned the movie, (thank you for that) ... I was so stunned by that film that I went back to the theater fifteen times by myself to watch it, and then couldn't wait until the DVD! Blessings! :-) <3

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 12/16/2018 2:10:00 PM

I love the way Brian's contests point us in the direction of poems we should read.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 12/16/2018 7:46:00 AM

I love the vivid imagery you painted with your poem Greg!:-) Congratulations on your win in Brian's contest!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2018 6:26:00 AM

That's so very kind of you, Edward, and I thank you sincerely, my friend ... blessings! :-)

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 12/14/2018 3:15:00 PM

Wow, 'drops of the mad moon, trickling' this is indeed sumptuous-

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2018 6:25:00 AM

Thank you very much, Michelle!! :-) <3