Next To of Course Progress My Planet I
“next to of course progress my planet i
love you, the ocean and the environ-
ment every person whether gay or bi
or trans or black, hispanic or asian
muslim pagan atheist or hindu
social justice and ecowarriors
illegal immigrants and felons too.
but conservatives, whites and gun owners
intolerant deniers all can fry
born-again christian roman catholic
all racist sexist nazis to a man
not tolerating other folks is sick
i hate those fascists, hope they all just die--”
He spoke. And sipped a little Evian
October 24, 2019
(with apologies to e e cummings)
I am aware that this parody of cummings' sonnet may be controversial-- but then, so was the original... and being controversial never stopped cummings! I also thought it might be interesting to approach the idea of the original poem from the other direction, so to speak. Compare it to the original text... a link:
https://allpoetry.com/next-to-of-course-god-america-i
I adhered to the usual ten syllables per line, while cummings' lines, while mostly of 10-syllables, varied, from nine to twelve. I did faithfully follow his rhyme scheme in the sestet (abcba c). I also toyed with the notion of changing the "He" to "She" in the final line, but decided to remain nearer the original... still, that would be the PC thing to do, eh?
Note 12/7/2019: while this, like the original cummings poem, is an Italian [Petrarchan] Sonnet [of sorts], I have reclassified it as a "Burlesque" since it is of course a parody.
Copyright © J P Marmaro | Year Posted 2019
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