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Neither Loud Nor Proud

You can’t hold your breath and say see you later So as they got out they stayed silent When I let one loose in the elevator And it was both silent and violent The chocolates are melting, the flowers are wilting From my trouser pockets there’s steam And that’s why I prayed that the lady who’d stayed Was always that odd shade of green 1 August 2021 Contest: When I Let One Loose In The Elevator Sponsor: Charles Messina

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Date: 8/11/2021 10:44:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a fun write. "Neither Loud Nor Proud" gave me a laugh. Thanks. Have a blessed day with your win...............
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/12/2021 2:39:00 PM
Thanks, Paula. Glad you enjoyed. Terry
Date: 8/10/2021 7:53:00 PM
LOL! Congrats, Terry! Janice
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Date: 8/12/2021 2:38:00 PM
Thank you, Janice. Terry
Date: 8/10/2021 3:12:00 PM
Every time I get in a lift ill remember these gems, congrats on your win Terry. Tom
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/12/2021 2:38:00 PM
Thanks, Tom. Terry
Date: 8/9/2021 10:42:00 PM
Dear Terry, enjoying reading the contest entries, so funny. Congratulations...Delice
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/10/2021 6:37:00 AM
They were all fun, but I’m still surprised by the two to one ratio of lady fluffers to male fluffers. Thanks, Delice. Terry
Date: 8/9/2021 8:00:00 PM
I'm like a dog with two tails, Terry, epic close for you have truly brought the house down my friend, my compliments on your gold win ... come rain or shine, Aloha!
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/10/2021 6:40:00 AM
Thanks William. None of us were in line for the William Shakespeare prize for outstanding high-brow verse... but hey... I think we all had fun. Terry
Date: 8/9/2021 4:56:00 PM
Blame it on the poor lady who had that odd shade of green. Lol :-D Congratulations Terry. Nicely done! Cheers Anne :-)
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/9/2021 5:03:00 PM
Thanks, Anne. Glad you enjoyed. Terry
Date: 8/9/2021 4:44:00 PM
That’s a laugh out loud one Terry you should be proud, what fun. Congratulations on your win… Belle
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/9/2021 4:59:00 PM
Thanks Belle, but I bow to your superior pumping prowess and accept my bronze medal with dignity and decorum ;-) Terry
Date: 8/9/2021 3:13:00 PM
I'm keeping away from lifts after reading these poems ... its been a gas:-) many congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/9/2021 3:18:00 PM
Thank you Jan. I wasn’t speaking from experience of course. No, no, that would never do. ;-) Terry
Date: 8/9/2021 7:32:00 AM
LOL...that last line just made me go Eww! Love this, Terry. Congratulations on your win! All the best, Charlie
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Date: 8/3/2021 8:08:00 AM
lol, very good this did make me chuckle. Though think I will try an avoid elevators much as I can, Emilia :)
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/3/2021 9:04:00 AM
Thanks Emilia, glad you sniffed this one out. Sorry for any olfactory distress. ;-) Terry
Date: 8/1/2021 1:57:00 PM
The silent but violent are the worst, you just don't smell em coming, unlike that trumpet sound that gives you a chance to exit the scene. Lol Good luck Terry. Tom
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/1/2021 2:05:00 PM
Good job the elevator wasn’t stuck between floors, eh, Tom. Thanks. Terry
Date: 8/1/2021 11:50:00 AM
Nasty but nice imagery Terry, somehow you make me want to hold my nose whilst reading, great one for the contest, cheers David
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Terry Flood
Date: 8/1/2021 1:00:00 PM
Thanks, David. Glad you ‘enjoyed’. Terry
Date: 8/1/2021 11:24:00 AM
Irish?
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Date: 8/1/2021 12:14:00 PM
Hi Rico... I was totally baffled by your comment until I remembered the ‘Green Lady’. ;-) Terry