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Neatnik and the Beatnik

jay is different than he has ever been a neatnik of course, and he is my twin. whereas I am a beatnik, messy and thin. he is a cleaner, a duster, no dirt on his chin. I am slovenly, a messy hoarder, a collector, a slob. my dungarees are usually filthy, rolled up in a glob. no one is dirtier than I except maybe our uncle Bob. bob eats like a hog sloppy buttery corn on a cob. my brother’s cleanliness is annoying; it gets in my way. he is way too serious, always cleaning, never has time to play. his skin is sun-deprived, he stays inside to wash down the fray. a beatnik, I am the exact opposite of my neatnik brother, Jay.

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Date: 4/25/2023 7:52:00 PM
Opposites attract, they say... I have the New York Jewish version of this. It's entitled 'The Nudnik and the Rude-nik:' Nudnik: "You eat like a pig." Rude-nik: "I'd say 'Shut-up, MAN, but you only are only 1/2 qualified!" Keep smiling, Caren!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 4/26/2023 12:28:00 AM
"the nudenik and the rudeik" - I am liking this too.
Date: 4/25/2023 7:41:00 PM
Be yourself! Yes!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 4/26/2023 12:29:00 AM
Always have to be

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