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April- 12- 2025
National Poetry Month Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Crystol Woods

 

Words Used Ghost, Heart. (Nouns) Shiver, Deliver, (Verb) Wicked, Viscous, (adjectives) I had a friend- jovial and sweet, in my college days. The same room, we had shared at the hostel. I noticed, by and by, she was losing her sprightliness. Had no clue, what upsetting thoughts nagged her HEART. One night, she woke up screaming- “GHOST, Ghost” Looking delirious she said petrified, a ghost was at the window. I brushed it aside, thinking she had seen a nightmare. But her erratic behaviour continued, often acting bizarre. Slowly, she seemed to have slipped into a spell of silence. There was always a look of horror in her eyes. She was no more the cheery girl of the past. Into a world of spectral shadows, she seemed to have sunk. If ever I woke up from my sleep, I saw her wide eyed, Gazing into the air, as if seeing something horrifying. Once, she said, she saw a skeleton dangling on a VISCOUS spider net. Often, she was seen SHIVERING and stopped behaving normal. So upset, I wished to DELIVER her of her mournful plight, Her parents were informed who took her to a doctor. Under examination, she was diagnosed with Schizophrenia, Characterized by hallucinations of WICKED spirits, haunting her. * * * * * * * When memories come surfing, still my heart goes out to her Who fell into the abysmal depths of delusion and frightful fantasy. Will antidepressants work on her? Will she ever become whole again? Or will the dark demons continue to haunt her, day and night?

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Date: 4/13/2025 1:13:00 PM
Dear Valsa, your poem is deeply moving and told with tenderness and quiet sorrow. You've captured the gradual unravelling of someone once vibrant, and the helplessness of watching a friend fade into a world you can’t reach. The progression from lighthearted college days to eerie silence and fear is written so clearly, and so compassionately. Wonderfully written and best of luck in the contest..
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Date: 4/13/2025 10:54:00 AM
Dearest Valsa, the artistic acrobatics of your images and storytelling leave me wanting to read and re-read your poem. I know your compassionate heart grieved as you watched your friend sink deeper into the darkness of her disease with a feeling of helplessness. Thank you for sharing this story. So important we are exposed these stories! Mental illness wrecks havoc for its victims and all who love them. Thank you for this compassionate poem. Blessings and prayers to all, dear friend. Best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 4/13/2025 12:35:00 AM
Omg sweet valsa! I love this! Youv explained what i cant so concisely and in a detailed manner, doin storytelling in such an engaging manner, showing what individuals diagnosed with schizophrenia experience and what those around them witness so eloquently! You are an amazing storyteller! And i always say this! Your skills are worthy of all the accolades! I really felt it as i read "She was no more the cheery girl of the past. Into a world of spectral shadows, she seemed to have sunk." Sigh! Its heart wrenching! This is definitely a fave for me! Best wishes in the contest! Sending you light always
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Date: 4/12/2025 11:31:00 PM
What a great way to express the misery of this terrible disease. It's a like curse. My dad had it.
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Date: 4/12/2025 9:15:00 PM
What a visceral take on this collection of random words. Really well done shaping them into your story, Valsa. Such energy and feeling :)
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Date: 4/12/2025 10:02:00 AM
Dear Valsa, What an excellent poem on the awful descent of a once jovial buddy into the depths of mental illness, notably schizophrenia. The subject also delves into the issues of friendship, grief, mental health difficulties, and the haunting character of disease, which may distort reality. The poem expresses powerlessness and concern for a buddy who has had terrifying hallucinations and delusions. Your word choices are emotional and vivid. Words like "jovial," "sweet," "horror," "spectral shadows," and "haunting" draw a sharp contrast between the friend's previous enjoyment and her current anguish. The use of capital letters for terms such as "GHOST," "VISCOUS," "SHIVERING," and "DELIVER" underlines their significance and gives the poem more emotional weight.
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Date: 4/12/2025 5:45:00 AM
Oh, this is so so sad. I've always been horrified by that possibility. I'm bipolar and once, before being diagnosed, saw some things that horrified me... I certainly empathize with your poor friend. Wonderful poetry. God bless you. Love, Gina
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Date: 4/12/2025 11:17:00 PM
I feel for you Gina. Again such horrifying things won't trouble you as you are under the protective wings of our Lord. My prayers are with you dear one.
Date: 4/12/2025 5:13:00 AM
Sorry to hear about your friend Valsa, I hope with medication she can lead a normal life. Hope you're having a lovely weekend. Tom
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