Mythmakers Often Miss the Stop

Each moment arrives
already threaded—
camels crossing through narrowed eyes,
yesterday's needles.
I see the burden in your face when I get here,
but it’s not your face;
rather a ripple of something older, 
residue caught in the glass
nothing but an echo of now. Do you see that?
A life lived sideways,
pressed into the sand.

My bus driver is Atlas today,
holding a world hostage
until I meet his raised eyebrows
with an acknowledgment,
in addition to the usual fare.
The woman on the corner is Circe,
turning glances to granite,
spinning myths into tricks—
even the barista, bean-stained hands, 
shifts like Persephone, balancing 
her sweet against the darkness.

What is our world if not echoes
refracted, meals consumed after death?
What is real except an insurrection 
of stories, clawing at the edges of us,
our susceptible flesh, infected with personality?

These vaunted archetypes,
they hide the hollows in our marrow,
make us no match
for the maps we mistake
for ourselves. You tilt your head,
you ask me what I see. I see, I say,
I have seen, the echoes came first—

shadows carved on walls long
before the names, long before the bodies.

Go ahead, laugh—step into the light.
But remember it moves faster than you 
think, burns brighter than you see, and always 
drags its shadow behind.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 12/8/2024 11:53:00 PM
So much depth in this very engaging write dear jaymee, its always good to read you and see you write also for a contest and you’ve nailed it on this theme really, light often is a fleeting shadow sometimes and everything keeps changing but also remains somewhat the same, what is life if not for echoes? What i love the most in this poem is “ camels crossing through narrowed eyes, yesterday's needles.” i literally saw and felt that! Yesterdays needles! How clever! Congratulations on your win. Sending you light always
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Date: 12/4/2024 9:46:00 PM
+FAV, Phew, such powerful poetry! I shall read it over and again. precious write dear poet. cheers.
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Date: 12/8/2024 1:47:00 PM
Wow, thanks so much for such a kind comment. I'm sincerely flattered.
Date: 11/27/2024 2:38:00 PM
Brilliant poem Jaymee, great to see gods and goddesses still alive and kicking in our everyday lives, so many angles, shadows, and echoes shifting around changing places, yet you seem to keep them all together with a wonderfully crafted temporal perspective, I believe Dilly will love this one for her contest, cheers David
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Date: 11/30/2024 4:24:00 PM
Thanks, David. I sincerely appreciate your stopping by to comment. It's always nice to place in a contest (far nicer than I'd like to admit, usually), but I genuinely enjoyed the prompt on this one, so it matters much less whether it happens :) I really like your work and I thank you again for taking the time to comment on mine. Take care.
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