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Mythmakers Often Miss the Stop

Each moment arrives already threaded— camels crossing through narrowed eyes, yesterday's needles. I see the burden in your face when I get here, but it’s not your face; rather a ripple of something older, residue caught in the glass nothing but an echo of now. Do you see that? A life lived sideways, pressed into the sand. My bus driver is Atlas today, holding a world hostage until I meet his raised eyebrows with an acknowledgment, in addition to the usual fare. The woman on the corner is Circe, turning glances to granite, spinning myths into tricks— even the barista, bean-stained hands, shifts like Persephone, balancing her sweet against the darkness. What is our world if not echoes refracted, meals consumed after death? What is real except an insurrection of stories, clawing at the edges of us, our susceptible flesh, infected with personality? These vaunted archetypes, they hide the hollows in our marrow, make us no match for the maps we mistake for ourselves. You tilt your head, you ask me what I see. I see, I say, I have seen, the echoes came first— shadows carved on walls long before the names, long before the bodies. Go ahead, laugh—step into the light. But remember it moves faster than you think, burns brighter than you see, and always drags its shadow behind.

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Date: 12/8/2024 11:53:00 PM
So much depth in this very engaging write dear jaymee, its always good to read you and see you write also for a contest and you’ve nailed it on this theme really, light often is a fleeting shadow sometimes and everything keeps changing but also remains somewhat the same, what is life if not for echoes? What i love the most in this poem is “ camels crossing through narrowed eyes, yesterday's needles.” i literally saw and felt that! Yesterdays needles! How clever! Congratulations on your win. Sending you light always
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Date: 12/4/2024 9:46:00 PM
+FAV, Phew, such powerful poetry! I shall read it over and again. precious write dear poet. cheers.
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 12/8/2024 1:47:00 PM
Wow, thanks so much for such a kind comment. I'm sincerely flattered.
Date: 12/4/2024 8:11:00 AM
I spent much of my time saying 'shut up' to this poem and feeling incredulous that something so brilliant was before my eyes. Every new stanza made me throw my hands up in disbelief or spit on the floor. What was this doing in my list of entries rather than being a prominent poem in a respected journal?! I'm still furious - please enter it in contests with prize money and send me a cut of the winnings. (I loved it and am honoured you wrote it for my prompt)
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Date: 12/4/2024 4:39:00 PM
Wow, I’m floored by your comment—thank you for such a generous response! Your prompt pushed me to dig deep, and I’m honored it resonated so strongly. I’ll definitely take your advice and submit it more widely (and if there’s prize money, you’ll get your cut!). Thank you for creating the space for work like this—it’s been a privilege to be part of your contest.
Date: 11/27/2024 2:38:00 PM
Brilliant poem Jaymee, great to see gods and goddesses still alive and kicking in our everyday lives, so many angles, shadows, and echoes shifting around changing places, yet you seem to keep them all together with a wonderfully crafted temporal perspective, I believe Dilly will love this one for her contest, cheers David
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Date: 11/30/2024 4:24:00 PM
Thanks, David. I sincerely appreciate your stopping by to comment. It's always nice to place in a contest (far nicer than I'd like to admit, usually), but I genuinely enjoyed the prompt on this one, so it matters much less whether it happens :) I really like your work and I thank you again for taking the time to comment on mine. Take care.

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