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Mythical Mirage

As my iris heart sleeps on an orchid pillow ~ fading memories alive like alzheimer's blooms swirl in magnolia zephyrs... I'm a myth, reborn as rust, in life's twilight rendezvous, laced with truth's tulip Luna and lies' lavender crescent ~ alike like laser light, serenading in cranberry croons of time. Eden's mirage fades, silky rings of illusion ~ hue a milky light This poem has been crafted with the poetic forms Tanka, Sijo and Haiku.

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Paige Hind

Date: 12/27/2023 7:42:00 PM

Gorgeous - all of it- and you're 18??? Wow, dear, I remember what I was writing at 18... you're truly prodigeous. Wishing you and your muse, lots and more light!

Hiya Sharma
Date: 1/1/2024 6:03:00 AM

Awh, your beautiful comment melted my heart, dear Paige.. Thank you so much for spreading such kindness.. Yes I'm 18 and I started writing at the age of 14..poetry came as a therapeutic blessing for me.. Wishing you light and love :)

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/24/2023 4:44:00 AM

you are so creative, it floors me, Merry Christmas dear heart

Charles Messina

Date: 12/23/2023 3:01:00 AM

Beautiful imagery, Hiya. A lovely write, dear friend. Merry Christmas to you and your family! Charlie

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 12/23/2023 1:06:00 AM

I love the exquisitely beautiful imagery of this haunting poem, Hiya. Best wishes for the contest. :)

Eve Roper

Date: 12/22/2023 11:29:00 PM

great imagery of your heart and pillow. fading memories alive like Alzheimer's ... I dread that word. Have seen enough people with Alzheimer's that I wish I never get or dementia. I Merry Christmas my friend.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/22/2023 3:34:00 PM

Love the imagery and mood of this piece.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/22/2023 1:08:00 PM

Awesome blending of three forms in your signature style imagery, Hiya. I like them all, but especially the haiku!

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/22/2023 12:43:00 PM

Thank you for this mixed poem of diversity. It is a winding road of loss of memory. May memory never fade.

Silent One

Date: 12/22/2023 11:07:00 AM

An excellent use of all three forms.. I could feel the fragility of the first poem, showing your vulnerabilities through the use of petal metaphors and the Sijo is deep and profound and once again great use of metaphors.. finally your haiky finishes the threesome perfectly with the use of great words to create vivid imagery.. Good luck in the contest..

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/22/2023 8:34:00 AM

Oh, dear Hiya, your poetic prowess leaves me in awe. Your mastery of language and vivid imagery is truly remarkable. You have revolutionized the world of poetry by forging a deep connection between flowers and the complexities of human emotions. I find myself unable to determine the superior form among the exquisite blend of tanka, Sijo, and haiku, as each one holds its unique beauty.

Valsa George

Date: 12/22/2023 8:18:00 AM

"As my iris heart sleeps on an orchid pillow ~". How do you conceive such ideas! "iris heart and orchid pillow'.... so unique, typically Hiyan! I don't think anyone has used such combinations earlier. You have set a new tone for poetry.... connecting flowers with feelings and emotions. I cannot say of this melange of tanka, Sijo and haiku, which one is better. The three forms are equally beautiful. I had thought of taking part in this contest. Now after reading this, I have to reconsider my daring ! All the Best Hiya!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/22/2023 6:43:00 AM

I guess maybe for a contest. Way to go. Thank you for sharing it and for dropping by. You have a included such descriptive phrases with so much color. Sara K

Ink Empress

Date: 12/22/2023 6:32:00 AM

I just love everything about this. Hah! From colours to all the pretty words used to glamorise pain in such eloquence. I especially love the opening tanka how you’ve written “ my iris heart sleeps on an orchid pillow “ wow orchid pillow! The sort of line that truly would captivate any reader. “ I'm a myth, reborn as rust, in life's twilight rendezvous,“ i love that! How deep it is and meaningful truly is impressive! From alliterations to emotions and imagery this take truly is just brilliant! I

Ink Empress
Date: 12/22/2023 6:33:00 AM

Am sure it will do very well in the contest too, as your lines and forms used here flow with each other. And to end it with a haiku is brilliant. I love the imagery there too! Fave it is. Best wishes for the contest