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This was my poem with seven lines I meant to post for last week's Fun and Game Poetry challenge. So what you see in comments goes with another poem which I needed to post six hours later to qualify for a Sept 14 or later time deadline but I was a little too early. That other poem I have posted Sept 15 .

My Week Days Before Retirement

Monday was for me a day when I felt blue.
Tuesday was not much better, I would say.
Wednesday meant work for the week was half through.
Thursday saw the weekend coming. Hip hip Hooray.
Friday was when I’d collect my pay.
Saturday more fun – if  the cash was not all spent.
Sunday I would go to church and hopefully repent.

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Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh

September 17, 2026 at 1:16 AM

Lighthearted, honest, and very well crafted. Enjoyed the poem a lot.

Joseph P. DiMino

September 14, 2026 at 3:50 PM

Indeed, six senses -- spirit where I live and thrive eternally.

Ink Empress

September 14, 2026 at 12:05 PM

Awwn this is beautiful sweet andrea So well written I love also the arrangemnt of words I love the essence of this write Please do check your email asap Pleasure reading Sending you light

Jay Narain

September 14, 2026 at 11:02 AM

Nice poem. Spiritual, reflecting God's blessing.

Hiya Sharma

September 14, 2026 at 6:43 AM

Oh what a delectable and sanguine write this is, sweet Andrea! 😍🥹🫂🩷 I can feel, hear, smell, see and touch the beauty of it all with the love of Almighty! Absolutely ethereal in every sense, every line has its own profound gorgeousness .. "hear her also singing in the thrush’s throat" that line is so very creative wowzieezzz!!! And the way you've formatted 'linger' that's so eye-alluring too.. ahhhh! And what a stellar last line.. Sending you hugsz and love, with poetic warmth, 🍁🍂🌙💫

Sara Kendrick

September 14, 2026 at 4:48 AM

Ahh!! I enjoyed this spiritually inspired work, Andrea. Thank you for sharing your work with us. Way to go. 👏✍️. Sara K.

Sotto Poet

September 14, 2026 at 4:27 AM

A poem related to the five senses is genuis, Andrea. Great alliteration, this is a fave.

Moon Harp

September 14, 2026 at 4:14 AM

Andrea, I love this dynamic poem giving poetic examples of our 5 senses, then wrapping these all up in the sixth sense of sensing God's Love. Well done. Moon Harp

Howard Kerr

September 13, 2026 at 10:43 PM

A sumptuous poem you have composed here, Andrea. Picturesque settings, lavish imagery. Alliterations used effectively. Thank you so very much for your generous insights on Colours Of Autumn. Much appreciated. Have a happy week ahead. Howard

Andrea Dietrich

September 13, 2026 at 10:51 PM

Thanks, Howard