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It wasn’t that I’d done you wrong I'd welcomed you into my heart’s home I'd cherished you and I had fed you I'd protected you I had let you dream your dreams in comfort in safety and I had loved you: You were my own And yet…. day upon day, you waited for the opportunity to confess knowing it would kill me knowing I would bleed... you had a perverse pleasure in planning…. the murder my heart and I never had a clue I trusted you You planned…you observed and all the while you smiled acting sweet and caring checking on me making sure my needs were met And then out of nowhere like lightning you struck my unsuspecting heart rammed the dagger in deep and twisted t*w*i*s*t*e*d to make sure every drop of blood was spilt Satisfied and sure of yourself you hid your gruesome work underneath layers of indifference buried or.... so you thought but every now and then you hear it I know….I can see it on your face You hear the beating of my heart- my tell-tale heart it still beats for you It’s still ALIVE! You try to deaden it the noise It’s driving you mad as you wine and dine her You try to make love to her more vigorously than before more often more intensely but as she is screaming your name begging you for more in the crescendo of passion You hear it... It's the beating of my heart It drowns out her voice It drowns out everything It pounds in your head My love is not dead You can’t go on enraged, seething you leave her wanting as you run out of the room bellowing… “STOP IT! I hear your cry I killed your love Why do you still haunt me?” Beat after beat after beat after...b..e..a..t.... My heart is still alive You feel it You are drawn to it She notices They notice You are agitated Something is driving you mad It’s me You remember my goodness My smile...my bed...my scent my love...my body...my warmth That pounding in your head is desire for....me It gets louder…LOUDER As you walk over to where I stand with each quickened step the pounding intensifies Surely everyone must hear it You come closer the indifference gone from your face Love...Passion...Repentance I hear the beating thundering in my own ears my love for you You are closer you put your head on my chest as your tears wet my blouse I run my hands through your hair pressing you closer I whisper… “Listen… My Tell-Tale heart Is still beating for you!” For Tommy's Poe Contest A remaking of the Tell-Tale Heart story

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 10/14/2018 10:34:00 PM
"Heav'n has no rage like love to hatred turn'd,...Nor Hell a fury, like a woman scorn'd." I enjoyed this and I can see a lot of thought was put into it. Thanks E. M.
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Date: 12/5/2015 2:52:00 PM
Shame you din't get this in before the contest closed my little Desert Orchid. You definately put your stamp to this poe-m lol. Take care, Richard
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/5/2015 11:18:00 PM
You are a funny man, Mr Seal...No, the Poe-m wouldn't have fared well in the contest anyway, I believe, so I'm glad I didn't manage to get it in. Thanks for the visit, and congrats on your win.
Date: 12/5/2015 11:09:00 AM
Edgar Allen Poe is one of the first poets I ever read, and got me interested in poetry as a kid. Great write, you really put your style into this Poe like poem! :) Hugs
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/5/2015 11:17:00 PM
He is amazing. A dream within a dream....wonderful writer. Thanks, dear Arthur. You always lift my spirit. Your WOW bank never runs out of WOWs as you mentioned earlier. :) Hugs
Date: 12/4/2015 9:54:00 PM
Well hello you!...I'm alive..and this got my blood pumping....great job swetie...such passion spilled out into your words...I would have kicked him in the well....good riddance..:)
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/5/2015 11:16:00 PM
Yes, I saw your posts here and there and am glad to know you are alive and well, dear. Thank you for your sweet compliment. It's hard to kick someone whom you love....I know. I'm a sucker for love. Hugs and welcome back.
Date: 12/4/2015 10:09:00 AM
Hi Eileen.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/5/2015 11:15:00 PM
Hello, Richard. :) :) :)
Date: 12/3/2015 5:52:00 PM
A chilling, most entertaining read! Great job Eileen (: Love that it is in the victim's perspective. Always, Laura
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/5/2015 11:15:00 PM
Thank you for your visit to my Poe poem, Laura. You are kind as ever. I will visit you soon. Hugs
Date: 12/3/2015 10:59:00 AM
My pleasure Eileen, hugs Rick.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/3/2015 11:30:00 AM
:)
Date: 12/3/2015 10:04:00 AM
So great to have you posting again. I suspect this will do very well Eileen. This is infused with heat and emotions. I like what you have done with this piece, it's even more amazing!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/3/2015 10:43:00 AM
Contest is closed. The winners have already been posted. Didn't make it in time. That week I was just too depressed to get my head around working on it. Oh well...least it got me to post again. Hugs
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/3/2015 10:42:00 AM
Thanks, Richard. I will try to write now and again....The second part of the semester always gets trying for me. We are done with most of the theory and now it must be put into practice. Lots of essays and outlines coming in. I get tired of editing. Oh, well. I will use the weekends whenever I can. Thanks for your visit to me while away. You buoy up my spirit. Hugs
Date: 12/3/2015 8:44:00 AM
i like the brooding, intricate mood of this piece, eileen.. very detailed, very poe in tone!..huggs
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/3/2015 10:44:00 AM
Thank you, Nette. I love reading the Tell-tale Heart to my class. it's a perfect sample of how one can use voice and intonation to bring across feelings of fear and madness. I LOVE it. I don't usually go for dark, but now and again....it feels good. Hugs
Date: 12/3/2015 8:25:00 AM
Well done. Rotten man he is never happy with a wonderful relationship He always wants more or what he can not have. Hugs Edith
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/3/2015 10:47:00 AM
Edith, hello dear. So good to see you here on my page. Thank you ever so much for your continued friendships. Sorry I haven't been so great in responding lately...I've been down. Better now. :) Yes, the man in this poem is a real rascal....never satisfied. Here's the joke: Woman come in all shapes and sizes and textures...much like fruit. I myself am a pear shaped woman. ;) The problem with men is.....they like fruit salad! ;) There, Richard...what do you have to say to that. Hugs, both of you.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2015 10:00:00 AM
Not all men! But sadly true for some.
Date: 12/3/2015 5:22:00 AM
Excellent. An incredible piece. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/3/2015 11:30:00 AM
Thank you for your visit, Ravi. I appreciate it.
Date: 12/2/2015 6:25:00 PM
WOW! Eileen this is an incredible write! Dramatic and passionate! Best wishes in the contest! Love, Kim
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/3/2015 10:40:00 AM
Thanks, Kim. I was too late to enter the contest, but I did ask the contest sponsor on his blog if he'd give it a read and still give an opinion. Thanks for sharing your opinion with me. It means a great deal. I haven't been writing for a while, so this repost was a good boost for me. Hugs
Date: 12/2/2015 3:35:00 PM
Eileen... Even if its a re-write..This is still you and so you..This poem is packed with emotions..I can picture a movie in my mind while I read it.Passionate abd Outstanding indeed. a fav
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/3/2015 10:39:00 AM
Thanks, sweetie. You are always a source of encouragement to me. May God reward you richly for it. :) It was late for the contest, but...at least it broke my spell of being away. Hugs
Date: 12/2/2015 1:29:00 PM
Wow Eileen jan... this is an incredible piece... I felt the pain in my heart while reading about his betrayal .. and then the rush of joy through my veins when repentance bloomed... You are amazing!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/2/2015 2:15:00 PM
Thanks, Rahy. If you were able to feel the emotions, then the poem has been effective. This is a repost of an older poem that I reworked for the contest, but I was too late to enter it, unfortunately. Thanks for the visit.
Date: 12/2/2015 11:44:00 AM
WoW! Elieen you have created your own masterpiece. You captured such raw and deep emotions. Never did my mind wander you had my full attention. Your have an amazing pen. Excellent job .Good luck in the contest. It's a without a doubt 7 :-) Alexis
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/2/2015 12:44:00 PM
Thanks, sweetie. You are always so kind and encouraging. Sorry I haven't been around much. Haven't felt like writing. This is a re-post. I think the contest has closed because I don't find a listing.....Anyway...better than nothing. :) Hugs
Date: 12/2/2015 11:35:00 AM
Well done LO, I felt the hammering beat -- Love, Passion Repentance echoes loudly and that sweet whisper . . . your are the grandmaster of these writes!! 7
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/2/2015 12:41:00 PM
Thanks, Coach. Glad you could stop by. I'm glad you liked this. It's actually a repost. I wrote it some time ago. Can't seem to come up with something new. All the best.