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My Sister Love-A Collaboration With Broken Wings

Not a day since you left me sister- does my h e a r t not WEEP a thousand sorrows, oh, sister love my TEARS could fill an ocean blue. I stand at your T O M B and wonder of what could have been, and recall how PEACEFUL you were in r e p o s e , hands in prayer, rosy lips and cheeks, oh how BEAUTIFUL! Perfectly lovely except you were quite dead, QUITE dead . . . Neither, from the deepest S H A D O W S in my SOUL , sister- can I silence the sweet sound of your voice, how I wish to s i n g with you songs of J O Y that I so affectionately remember as I whisper at your grave. Sister dear, I smile FORLORN and l o n e l y with faded m e m o r i e s of you and I return to haunting vivid thoughts. W E were but children when you went away . . . As I brush the vines from the stone I wonder, sister- would Y O U do the same if it were ME lying there, so C L O S E we were when we were young. The moss on your tomb is soft in the morning mist; it reminds me of your s k i n when last I TOUCHED you, s m o o t h and c o o l as your head lay tenderly on that small pillow. oh, beautiful d r e a m e r do you dream of me in heaven above . . . And when my days on this EARTH end sister- will you be there at the golden g a t e to welcome me home, and take my HAND in yours just like you used to. Can we s t r o l l heaven's gardens together, and sit side-by-side on the grass w h i s p e r i n g silly secrets . . . I touch your name ENGRAVED deep into the cold stone, and my heart b l e e d s again and again, each time . . .
07/05/2017
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017


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Date: 3/13/2018 6:47:00 PM
Beautiful collaboration and win :)
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James Inman
Date: 3/13/2018 7:47:00 PM
Hi Debbie, thank you for sharing your time with me tonight and thank you for your lovely comments.
Date: 11/16/2017 8:57:00 AM
A poignant write...Congrats to both of you on a fine win
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James Inman
Date: 11/16/2017 1:08:00 PM
Thanks Joseph.
Date: 11/15/2017 1:49:00 PM
- Congratulations on your wonderful co-writing, James :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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James Inman
Date: 11/15/2017 2:50:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise.
Date: 11/15/2017 11:48:00 AM
Many congrats James - I was very surprised to see your Constance had written this as the style is so similar to LuLoo with the use of capitals and i thought it was her poem! many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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James Inman
Date: 11/15/2017 2:49:00 PM
Thank you for hosting the contest Jan. It was a pleasure writing with BW for your contest, now, to find the time to read all of them.
Date: 11/15/2017 9:59:00 AM
James, we got second place in the contest! Thank you so much for writing with me, we match perfectly, we wove those alternating verses without hesitation, you matched my style so well. I would be honored to write with you anytime! CONGRATULATIONS!
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James Inman
Date: 11/15/2017 2:47:00 PM
No BW, thank you for giving me the pleasure of writing with you. Any time.
Date: 8/21/2017 7:32:00 PM
An incredibly emotive write that leaves me with tears and wanting to offer comfort, though I know it is weak. That is the powerful impact of your words. The subject matter is devastatingly life altering, and your words have us feel it's loss, it's unbearableness and how love can pen such staggeringly beautiful poetry. Tremendous effort and great writing. I congratulate you both xo
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James Inman
Date: 8/24/2017 8:29:00 PM
I wrote a reply to your lovely comment Lynn but it's not here. OH NO! Sorry, I got side tracked. I give all the credit to BW. It's her story.
Date: 7/16/2017 4:25:00 PM
A beautifully rendered collaboration, James & Constance. There is a deep show of emotions when close siblings are separated by death! // paul
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James Inman
Date: 7/18/2017 7:33:00 PM
Thank you Paul.
Date: 7/14/2017 8:45:00 AM
James, thank you so much for being my writing partner for this project, our words meshed together as one, I am sure few would know who wrote which verses, thank you from the bottom on my broken heart, lol ~
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James Inman
Date: 7/14/2017 10:33:00 AM
Thank you BW. It was my pleasure. It was your heart that made the poem. I just filled in the spaces.
Date: 7/11/2017 7:46:00 PM
wow, this was so well collaborated. Even without her having told me, I would have known who you did this with!! GREAT job , my friend. I will go see BW's now!!
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James Inman
Date: 7/11/2017 9:43:00 PM
BW definitely has a unique style. I'm glad you enjoyed it. She gets all of the credit.
Date: 7/11/2017 6:58:00 PM
Ralph, what is this poetry arts page you were talking about where you saw my poem? Let me see this collab write now!
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James Inman
Date: 7/11/2017 9:36:00 PM
Left a reply on your "The Eyes Have It" poem. https://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry/art/178ddbd9-3f86-40fd-bfd7-25263f614f15
Date: 7/8/2017 3:36:00 PM
This is such a tender moving piece from both of you. I had a sister who died really young breaking our hearts. Her name was Marlena. Best of luck in the contest. : )
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James Inman
Date: 7/9/2017 8:35:00 AM
Connie, thank you for the lovely visit. I feel for your loss.
Date: 7/7/2017 7:40:00 PM
A very deep heart touching. Can't help my tears flowing down. You two have collaborated something so beautifully heartfelt... hugs :)
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James Inman
Date: 7/7/2017 11:52:00 PM
Thank you for the beautiful comment Akkina.
Date: 7/7/2017 4:28:00 AM
Such a deep and sad write. You both have brought to light to grief of losing a loved one. It's a grief that softens with time...yet it never leaves. Well I know, for I lost my dear mother.
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James Inman
Date: 7/7/2017 11:01:00 AM
One of the many inevitable consequences of aging Eileen. I had a great fear of loosing my mother when I was in my twenties. She is still with us but others are not. Thank you for your visit.
Date: 7/6/2017 9:45:00 AM
This is dark and so wonderful that I couldn't distinguish your work from Constance's :) well written, James and BW:)
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James Inman
Date: 7/6/2017 9:55:00 AM
Jo, thank you for the kind words. I give credit to BW, she created the context and set the tone with her sad beautiful words.
Date: 7/6/2017 8:15:00 AM
Your combined verses follow the same dark path and so nicely entwined, James.
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James Inman
Date: 7/6/2017 8:53:00 AM
Thank you Lin, it was such a pleasure for me to be able to write with BW. And may I say, what a lovely new photo you have.
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