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My Pain Is My Own

My life I leave without a fight Those vile creatures in their spite Have taken hold of all I own And dragged me back to where they roam The forests of the night. Their eyes aglow with bestial greed They slither round at sickening speed Their sympathy is no defence Their clamouring but a mere pretence It‘s my raw grief they need. It’s me they crave but not my flesh These weeping wounds that bleed afresh But lubricate the coiling mesh That tight encircles me. They feast upon my fear and pain And stoke the embers yet again To full blown tragedy. Yet still no tears have I let flow The bleak despair I’ll never show That they would have me cede Should I find arms to confort me So loving and strong they'd have to be Seeking not to stem the bleed. 4/12/20 126 words

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Date: 10/25/2020 12:22:00 AM
I can see the improvement from your previous poem... Your rhyme scheme has changed, which is always good to try something different. I can see there raw emotions in this poem just like your others.... We all wear a mask where we do not show the real emotions we hold inside, but once in a while, we meet people who see beyond and feel the pain and sorrow you hold inside... I hope you find strong loving arms that accept you and understand your battle scars..
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Silent One
Date: 10/25/2020 12:25:00 AM
How will they know of your fears, if they don't understand your pain...
Date: 10/24/2020 8:18:00 PM
Your words were perfectly chosen and the emotions in the lines you wrote create an intense picture of your title. I could feel the pain and anguish. The poem flows well with the rhythm and rhyme you used. Awesome work keep it up!
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Date: 10/24/2020 2:56:00 PM
Tansy, your affecting last three lines speaks strongly to the commitment of your title. A compelling poem of anguished emotions that you fully own, with such a wonderfully rhythmic rhyme scheme. Deep and emotive! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Tansy Roekaerts
Date: 10/24/2020 3:52:00 PM
Thank you so much, it was a 2nd attempt at the same poem so I worked quite hard and really appreciate your comments. Funnily enough the title, last three lines and slapping my leg to get the rhythm were the hardest bits, so I m so please asked you thought those elements were successful

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