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The Story of Your Stuff Poetry Contest
sponsored by Jaymee Thomas 07/31/24

Here on the cusp of all things, is where I succumb Ceding my stuff blindly, toward oblivion and none Unwilling to persevere, without a modicum of fun Listing in perpetual stasis, til the spasm’s undone And yet a god may save me, or a talisman of love Some prophet of euphoria, quelling ennui thereof Placing good tidings, into a universal equation Edifying eternity…..revealing its exact duration….. Alas he speaks in riddles, and treads a mobius strip Each cycle forming a twist, convoluting his trip Determined I follow, my awareness in collapse Narrow-mindedly stumbling into mortality traps Now I sense the endgame, but decline to exalt Its a distortion, an abortion, a cataclysmic fault Chance meeting with a nihilist, yields positive results Unable to see past zero, he reveals nothing but cults Here on the cusp of all things, is where I begun A contorted brain-f*ck, had no choice but to come A demon of clarity, with an open ended measure One who gives to please, but prefers taking pleasure To believe for one moment, I’d live off a dying spark Only denies potential, when again life goes dark With more light to come, my sunglasses prepared Eternity’s not polarised, just infinitely layered If a blind man articulates, I’ve seen all this before Screaming and convinced “I’m a seer at my core” Could be he’s mistaken, or deluded with Déjà vu Begs his final question, “do I have a point of view”?

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Date: 8/2/2024 3:55:00 PM
One of my special poets, David of morality and meaning. Great work as always~Sending some of our sunshine
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/3/2024 6:07:00 AM
Heya Anaya, your praise is way to kind, I get great enjoyment writing these existential pieces, Thank you so much for reading and comment, cheers David
Date: 8/2/2024 10:42:00 AM
I always find that when you think you're close to finding answers, it opens a few more doors and seems to be never ending, a man could lose his sanity lol. A well written and very thought provoking verse David. Roll on September, mind you with the weather we've got at the moment you could save a few euros lol. Just got back from down south, blue skies every day. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/2/2024 11:19:00 AM
Thanks Tom, that’s part of the appeal for me, not knowing all the answers, can’t think of anything worse than being a nihilist, it’s like saying I do have all the answers but they add up to nothing; No way I’ll keep searching and enjoying the search, well you certainly found the sun, not so great over here, I need that holiday in September, have a good weekend too, cheers David
Date: 8/2/2024 9:15:00 AM
I'd leave a comment but you appear to view opposing pov's as nothing but attention getting ploys for throat rammers. Well gosh, let's go for it anyway. First off, it's very well written and makes a valid point (as did Jesus), ie, that the blind will always lead the blind (vulnerable and naive ones) into a bottomless pit. There are many deceivers in the world. Many are "religious" preaching things that are half-truths or outright lies.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/2/2024 12:57:00 PM
I don’t want to get in, I’m just pointing out you have me blocked, whilst my page is open to absolutely everyone on PS, which in itself shows I am totally all inclusive, with no hidden agenda, no supporting hate speech, just the truth, and if you can’t handle the truth, then what better way than to hide from it behind a blocker button, I can’t even Fave your poems for Christ sake! Did you secretly fave this one it has 4 so far, cheers if you did!
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/2/2024 12:02:00 PM
I see your comments around the Soup David. I have neither a blind nor oblivious eye. When you can behave and stop supporting the hate speech I'll be glad to let you in. Ooh, I really must repost The Blocking Game song!
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/2/2024 10:38:00 AM
It’s a fair comment, and I certainly don’t take this particular one as ramming anything down my throat, but we already had that conversation and you know my feelings on jumping into another’s comments box especially a non religious person, and leaving unwanted biblical references, is of course throat ramming, but all that aside, I certainly go along with your second comment, and believe Jesus was a wise charismatic man, what was written afterwards I would certainly question, as indeed I question everything, even as to why you have me still blocked, thanks for stopping by cheers David
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/2/2024 9:17:00 AM
But I do absolutely believe there are truths to be found. They are not mystical, but logical, sensical, and that includes truths about how we got here, why we're here, and what comes afterward, if anything. I've been studying these things for forty years, though certainly no scholar. Just an avid student
Date: 8/1/2024 2:12:00 PM
Dear DK, this is a very deep poem one that made me read few times, and i did grasp the depth of what youv expressed and delivered here in such eloquence, what i love about this poem is your use of strong diction, and words such as “ ennui” which i love in a poem and also lines such as “universal equation” “mortality traps” “cataclysmic fault” “dying spark” and so much more in this truly is worthy of highlighting! While our views on what youv expressed here may differ your way of word weaving truly is impressive! Best wishes.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/1/2024 3:05:00 PM
Thank you Ink for commenting on this one, a lot of my posts are pretty deep and can make for difficult reading, I’m an existentialist and agnostic at heart, it weaves its way into a lot of my posts, but hey the main thing is we express our views freely and without ramming them down each other’s throat, I’m delighted you found this one impressive, and mentioned some lines you enjoyed, these type of poems one can take as much or as little as they want from them, still was quite enjoyable to write, thanks again, cheers David
Date: 8/1/2024 3:52:00 AM
Strengthening the will to find our own way is better advice rather than listening to a nihilist or demon who tries to tickle our ears. Your last verse could easily stand on its own as great poetry. Does a blind man have a point of view? Seriously clever, David. The mastery of your vocabulary speaks for itself... pun intended. Faving this one!
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/1/2024 12:08:00 PM
I like the nihilist one myself, it’s definitely a paradox, possibly even an oxymoron, :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/1/2024 6:37:00 AM
You know I never bestow accolades when I don't feel they are earned. It was the perfect ending line based on the poem's title. ;-)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/1/2024 6:12:00 AM
High praise Lin, not many people on this site can match your prowess of the English language myself included, always seems to be demons out there in one guise or another, that try bluff and ingratiate themselves upon others, I’m glad you enjoyed that line about the blind man’s pov, it seemed just right to end this one on, I really appreciate your comment and Fave, cheers David
Date: 8/1/2024 1:49:00 AM
You argue your ideas well. A poem with strength.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/1/2024 6:02:00 AM
Thanks Victor, I do like to add concepts with potency into my poems, cheers David
Date: 7/31/2024 11:39:00 PM
This has a sense of control of strength and anger running through it. Letting it all unfold, awaiting the revelation but it always being that moment before real clarity with no promise that there's any truth regardless of all the higher brain function figuring it out... So many great expressions - I think I'll fave it, it's got the edge
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/1/2024 3:22:00 AM
Heya Dilly, I really wanted to bring some different expressions into this one, I’m delighted you think they work, I would love to offer a blinding revelation, but this is probably as near as I can get for now, thank you so much for visit and the brave Fave, cheers David

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