Premiere Contest WinnerMy Inner Child

My heart utters gently: you are seven; I am too. Yet, the bloom of womanhood carries us now unto fields where spiced pleasure and abandonment mingle… I reminisce our childhood years, when as a girl, we would look out the bay window till late evening, awaiting Dad’s arrival. How cold those months while we freeze in longing, in tireless dismembering from an absence you , I could not bear: oh, we escape through storybooks, art-play, even dialogues with a guardian-moon allowing the release of damn cries, ‘ We don’t need a soldier, we need a father! Although the fear of sudden loss remains, this navel spins in unified order; knowing he loves us despite his passion for freedom. It is about time we embrace a wholeness ordained by healed seasons… then to dance around the fire, under dusk’s awakened joy; searching for the magic of stars…and treasure each purpose of Dad’s cherished footprints. .................. Laura Loo Contest: Any Poem Won in November ( not from mine) Written 10/17/2017 Resubmitted: 12/3/2017 Contest: What Child Is This
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Barden Avatar
October 25, 2017 at 5:24 PM
beautiful write, Nette - congrats on your win!
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October 24, 2017 at 12:33 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your first place win! Beautiful write! Heartfelt emotion. So well deserved
Daniel Avatar
October 19, 2017 at 7:55 AM
Awesome and well described the longing of a child for its father, congratulations on your well deserved win, Nette:)
Roper Avatar
October 18, 2017 at 6:41 PM
Awesome,. Nette, congratulations on your win!
Y. Avatar
October 18, 2017 at 3:12 PM
Hi Nette, This is beautiful and well written. Congratulations on your top win . It was well deserved:-) Alexis
Hamilton Avatar
October 18, 2017 at 1:15 PM
Well done Nette, congrats on your first place win, much deserved!
White Avatar
October 18, 2017 at 12:19 PM
Nette, beautiful! Congratulations on top win :)
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October 17, 2017 at 6:21 AM
Very moving, powerful poem, Nette. I love where you took the theme.
Vaso Avatar
October 16, 2017 at 10:04 PM
I came to read this again, somehow this poem resonated with me, not because my dad was away only cause I wish he was closer. I hope you are proud that your poems touch the heart of people. :) Hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
October 16, 2017 at 8:33 PM
Ohhh...the absence of a father...
Goff Avatar
October 16, 2017 at 8:03 PM
Very moving poem, Nette
Vaso Avatar
October 16, 2017 at 4:46 PM
Nette, this is beautiful, we feel the pain of children in each verse, and yet you feel a melancholy happiness as well!
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October 16, 2017 at 4:28 PM
So full of emotions--well written--love of Dad comes through--best for a win, nette!
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