Quoth Theraven Poet Villanelle

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My Heart Regifted

Forgive me for loving you, even though you never asked,
a secret kept like a pebble in my shoe, now smarting.
If heart dares to belong, it's just a weakness from my past.

Make scars worth the fight, put back the pin from grenade you grasped,
moment of truth arrives, met with two lips bruised and parting.
Forgive me for loving you, even though you never asked.

I thought I walked the streets alone, wearing a grotesque mask.
You were inside me all along, sweet message imparting.,
if heart dares to belong, it's just a weakness from my past.

How I've missed your awaited touch, and hoping it would last,
our sun grant'd pardons galore, for love's kindled restarting. 
Forgive me for loving you, even though you never asked.

I didn't say why I came back, you never took me to task.
tho' written in an inkling, the tear your eye was guarding..
if heart dares to belong, it's just a weakness from my past.

You never miss something until it goes and die is cast.
Your present regifted, from a long ago departing. 
Forgive me for loving you, even though you never asked.
If heart dares to belong, it's just a weakness from my past.

26 December 2020

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Juliet Ligon February 4, 2021 at 10:29 PM "Two lips bruised and parting." Powerful write and your lines piece together well in this form. Quoth Theraven February 6, 2021 at 10:33 PM Juliet, Danke schoen, we'll all get there one day. I promise & pray. -Richard

Linda Alice Fowler January 1, 2021 at 8:23 AM Fabulous villanelle my friend. Your pen is always spilling forth provocative and moving work. Belated congratulations on POTD! Happy New Year and all blessings for the coming months. Linda Quoth Theraven January 1, 2021 at 6:25 PM Linda, Thank you, this comment brightened my day. 'Your pen is always spilling forth...' I liked that! I keep wet wipes around for just that reason. Did you listen to the song? -Richard

Geoffrey Brewer December 31, 2020 at 8:36 AM High in sophisticated structure and striking wake-up metaphors. It impresses and arouses emotions. This is a lesson in the writing of a villanelle - complex but understandable. Very well done, Raven. Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 5:56 PM Geoffrey, Thanks, I hope this last day of 2020 has been a friend to you. Forgive me the grenade, I didn't want to let it go. Pun quite intended..Happy New Year friend... -Richard

Robert Lindley December 30, 2020 at 5:20 PM A truly wonderful POTD poem my friend. You most certainly nailed it with this one! Every stanza gold, a fav.... God bless.. Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 5:59 PM Thank you Robert. We both know which poem I would've wished for POTD, at least from this week. Glad tidings and better health for us all in the new year. -Richard

Quoth Theraven December 29, 2020 at 6:52 PM "Il cielo in una stanza" (The sky in a room) When you are here with me ~ This room no longer has walls ~ But trees, infinite trees ~ When you are close to me ~ This purple ceiling ~ No, it no longer exists ~ I see the sky above us ~ Let us stay here ~ Abandon yourself as if ~ There was no more ~ Nothing, nothing more in the world ~~~~~~~~~~ Play a harmonica ~ It seems to me an organ that vibrates for you for me ~ Up in the immensity of the sky ~ For you and me ~ In the sky ~~~~~~~~~~~

Janice Canerdy December 29, 2020 at 3:25 PM Deeply moving and so descriptive--deserving to be POTD, Richard. Janice Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 6:07 PM Thank you Janice. It was a first for me. My best wishes for you in the new year. -Richard

Arturo Michael December 29, 2020 at 5:52 AM Wow...this is good...Love the writing style here...Congratulations Quoth TheRaven on POTD...and all the best for 2021. Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 6:12 PM Arturo, Thanks for the comment. Wasn't it you that wrote 'Captured by Your Smile'? That was truly inspirational to me. I hope the new year finds you writing more inspiration poet. -Richard

Kim Rodrigues December 29, 2020 at 3:46 AM Strong metaphors and heartfelt refrain - very well done! A fave! I had to edit this as I found out, as I hoped, that this would be a POTD! Congratulations! Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 6:01 PM Kim, Thank you for the kindness. I wish all the best for you in the new year. -Richard

Alexis Y. December 29, 2020 at 2:49 AM WoW! Richard, What a well-written write. Each word and each stanza blew me away! A poem filled with a deep love that all wish to experience in their lifetime. Congratulations on the poem of the day. It was well deserved. Have a great day:-) Alexis Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 6:05 PM Alexis, Thank you for this comment. I wish that true love were as easy as writing a Villanelle. I wish you all happiness in the new year. -Richard

Regina Mcintosh December 29, 2020 at 2:31 AM Lovely writing, my friend, A treasure and blessing. I appreciate your talent. God B L E S S you always. Congrats on POTD!!! Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 6:03 PM Thank you, it's been quite a strange yet wonderful year. We'll see what the next one holds for us. -Richard

Jennifer Proxenos December 29, 2020 at 1:57 AM Tom my friend, I came to Poem of the day, and just before I opened the page up, I thought to myself it will be Tom I'm sure, well here we are - congratulations Tom for a perfect poem of what 2020 was like and how we are hoping for 2021. Your POTD is superb enjoy your having been honored today. Blessings, Jennifer. Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 6:20 PM That goes double for me Tom. And a Happy New Year too. -Richard Tom Cunningham December 29, 2020 at 3:39 AM Thank you very much Jennifer, soup mail. Tom

Jenna Logan December 29, 2020 at 1:28 AM Forgive me for not reading your Villanelle until now. It's quite lovely in its melancholia, Richard, and congratulations on it being choses as potd. I think we all must have some weakness from the past... Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 5:57 PM Happy New Year Jenna, may all our weakness' past. -Richard

Beryl Edmonds December 29, 2020 at 12:18 AM That’s beautiful Richard, love’s something that’s constantly regifted, memory is the gift made for this, Congratulations on poem of the day. Belle Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 8:08 PM Belle, Some of the best gifts thought of were regifted. And they count themselves lucky for it. -R

Eve Roper December 28, 2020 at 11:00 PM Wonderful Villanelle poem, Richard, I love the line, " like a pebble in my shoe, now smarting." I walk my dog everyday on a gravel parking-lot at the baseball fields and how I don't know, but always get a small pebble in my shoe and have to stop to toss it out.. it is smarts. :) Poem good for a win. Happy New year. Hugs Eve Quoth Theraven December 31, 2020 at 8:11 PM Eve, Thank you pebble wearer friend. Always save the best for last, this year and the next. -Richard

Quoth Theraven December 28, 2020 at 7:16 PM Thank you PS and all you wonderful poets for your comments on this Winter day. And thank you Andy Warhol for the fifteen minutes of fame. -Richard

Unseeking Seeker December 28, 2020 at 6:58 PM Magnetic and hypnotic! Congrats on POTD

Brandy Nicole December 28, 2020 at 5:48 PM "Forgive me for loving you, even though you never asked, you never miss something until . . . " So tender and heartfelt. Your words caress gently around me. Congratulations Richard, on Poem of the Day. ~ Brandy

Mark Koplin December 28, 2020 at 4:49 PM Well done! Congratulations on POTD!!

Akkina Downing December 28, 2020 at 4:04 PM Splendid poem, and congratulations on POTD... :)

Jan Allison December 28, 2020 at 10:26 AM Beautifully expressed Richard, an excellent villanelle, I have recently written one and know how challenging it is, many congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx

L Milton Hankins December 28, 2020 at 9:26 AM Beautifully expressed! Congrats on your POTD! Well-earned!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 28, 2020 at 9:17 AM That pebble in your shoe, smarting, got me, hook line sinker. Fantastic poem Richard! Congratulations for POTD honours! xomo

Constance La France December 28, 2020 at 8:55 AM Richard, a beautifully pen Villanelle poem full of deep love, congratulations on receiving POTD with this beauty _Constance

Quoth Theraven December 28, 2020 at 8:43 AM That feeling.., do you know it? When you click on Poem of the Day. See something so familiar. And realize it belongs to you. Thank you all for this present, a Christmas miracle, truly. -Richard

Paula Goldsmith December 28, 2020 at 8:02 AM Congratulations on your POTD win. "Beautiful" I love your line, "Forgive me for loving you, even though you never asked." Enjoy your win. Today, have joy/blessings...............

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