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My Fingers Eat Dirt

My feet drowned water
My fingers ate dirt
My mouth failed filth 
My heart beat yours
             While trying to kick habits
             You silenced my life 
             Suffocated spring rain
             Melted snow white pleasure
             Innocence excluded
My eyes burned charcoal 
My toes grew deep roots 
My waist encircled 
Your hate with metal 
       Today your cold bed 
       Will wither and wilt away 
       The story I needed to tell you 
       I take with me without regret 
       Our story ends here. 

                               Mine now begins. 

                                       ***

April 8, 2017
Copyright © Darren White
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Moses Avatar
April 24, 2017 at 5:13 AM
I really felt the emotion in this. Well written.
White Avatar
May 14, 2017 at 10:04 AM
Christie, I am sorry, I only see your comment now. Thank you.
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April 11, 2017 at 5:12 AM
Wow! You blew me away w/this poem, Darren. Your skillful pen writes sublime. I said to myself that title is great. And to read the substance of the poem, I just couldn't wait. You truly elevated my consciousness w/this reality altering poem. Great, great poem, my friend. Much love and respect to you young man.
White Avatar
April 11, 2017 at 5:19 AM
I am really honoured by your wonderful comment. Thank you so incredibly much :)
Vaso Avatar
April 10, 2017 at 10:22 PM
Tonight I eat dirt, that you may know that I understand! Absolutely great poetry and that music, how do you do it? Amazing.
White Avatar
April 11, 2017 at 12:38 AM
Thank you, my friend. That music is amazing, and I wrote the poem while istening to it. :)
Dietrich Avatar
April 9, 2017 at 8:52 PM
Darren, this is marvelously emotive and well crafted. GREAT writing, my friend. so you have got really curly hair. I'd never have guessed on that bald penguin. haha. I stopped using extensions years ago. It's all I can do now to keep up the color to stave off the gray!!
White Avatar
April 9, 2017 at 11:39 PM
Nothing wrong with grey. I love the color! Thank you for liking my poem.
Ella Avatar
April 9, 2017 at 2:37 PM
A new beginning - like spring :) This is a sad poem that ends on a positive note. The picture though - is that a plant? O.O
White Avatar
April 9, 2017 at 11:38 PM
Haha yes Sara, it's a plant :)
Rodrigues Avatar
April 9, 2017 at 5:47 AM
So many great images - my fingers ate dirt, my eyes burned charcoal...
White Avatar
April 9, 2017 at 5:52 AM
Thank you, Kim!
Deo Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 4:40 PM
The real LIFE begins with the poem's "ending" - so exquisite. Darren this piece covers almost all contradictions we humans experience. A SEVEN, kudos2U. And shabbat shalom/joy/Restoration
White Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 11:07 PM
Thank you very much, also for the 7 :) Yes, that is indeed what it's about.
Ricci Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 1:35 PM
Darren Darren Darren. I have no words. All I will say is may the little bird fly and be free. Such beauty and beyond the entry and the attached music. We readers thank you. I thank you. Well done entirely.
White Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 2:01 PM
Lisa, thank you. The little bird is free. :)
Wolf Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 10:27 AM
This poem shows great maturity, Duir! For one of such a tender age. I have just returned from a night out and it is nearly 2 in the morning! To find this gem, my friend! All I can say is, pizzazz! /|\
White Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 10:40 AM
Thanks Budgie my dear friend, now go to bed and SLEEP :)
Smith Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 8:46 AM
I can feel the sadness of a lost relationship. Hope you are doing okay...hugs
White Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 8:54 AM
Yes, a lost relationship, but fortunately not with Jason, thank you Tim, you read that well. Monday I get to hear when I can go back home...
Coreggia Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 8:46 AM
This is absolutely stunning, Darren, and what a powerful last line, but my favorite line is: "My heart beat yours". an awed 7:) Amitiés
White Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 8:55 AM
Anne-Marie, I am honoured, thank you, and yeah, I love that line too :)
Pigeon Tart Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 8:07 AM
Rich and life giving pen my friend xomo! 7
White Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 8:56 AM
Merci beaucoup! Ma mo ;)
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April 8, 2017 at 7:54 AM
A mind bender planted in fertile soil.
White Avatar
April 8, 2017 at 8:56 AM
Indeed. Thank you Richard :)
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