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My Father's Pen

My Father’s Pen Drizzle turning sleet. Window pane cold as he rests his cheek against it. Coke fire, astringent bitter warmth filling the room. On the table amber in cut glass, no ice, next to the tablet. An old pen cradled in the arthritic hand. From long ago; given him by his father before him, to cradle, to write. Now his to make words, to paint letter pictures, to fashion the stories. The words swirl and loop, playing endlessly. Atonal but rich, they form a trellis upon which to paint life.

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Date: 2/16/2022 2:39:00 PM
David, thank you for sharing your poem, I have just found it in amongst the poetry on the site. So many poets and poetry that amazes. You mange to create a real image of the characters within your poems. Now that your poems have been found, I will read on.
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David Holmes
Date: 2/28/2022 12:21:00 PM
John - thank you for the very kind comments, very much appreciated. David
Date: 2/16/2022 12:28:00 PM
David, a lovely, touching write.
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David Holmes
Date: 2/28/2022 12:20:00 PM
James, thank you! David
Date: 2/6/2021 7:43:00 PM
So glad to find this lovely poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology, David ~
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Date: 9/9/2020 1:02:00 PM
Congratulations on a well crafted poem... Merci, Panagiota xx
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Date: 7/28/2020 2:21:00 AM
That's a captivating tale of courage and creativity David. Congratulations on your win :) Blessings!
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David Holmes
Date: 7/31/2020 7:50:00 AM
Aditi - thank you, I appreciate your comment and congratulations, David
Date: 7/27/2020 3:10:00 AM
Beautiful ...
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David Holmes
Date: 7/31/2020 7:50:00 AM
Kai - thank you for your comment. David
Date: 7/24/2020 8:29:00 PM
This story is so well penned, David. It flows and the images are crisp and the last line summarizes the poem beautifully! Congratulations on your first place win!
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David Holmes
Date: 7/31/2020 7:49:00 AM
Sam - thank you for your congratulations, and for taking the time to comment on my poem. David
Date: 7/24/2020 9:43:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading this one. A beautiful write. Enjoy your win and day.........
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David Holmes
Date: 7/31/2020 7:47:00 AM
Paula, thank you so much for your comments - and so glad you enjoyed reading "My Father's Pen" David
Date: 7/24/2020 4:11:00 AM
A well deserved top spot David. a wonderfully painted word picture.
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David Holmes
Date: 7/24/2020 12:36:00 PM
John,thank you for the congratulations, I still have and use my father's fountain pen, a very special keepsake David
Date: 7/23/2020 9:37:00 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this; I'm delighted especially with the concluding lines: "Atonal but rich, they form a trellis upon which to paint life." God bless you.
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David Holmes
Date: 7/24/2020 12:35:00 PM
Beata - thank you so much for your congratulations and wonderful comments. Bless you as well David
Date: 7/23/2020 2:19:00 PM
Gorgeous penning, a fave for me David. Congratulations on your well deserved to win! ~Maureen
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David Holmes
Date: 7/24/2020 12:34:00 PM
Maureen - thank you so much for your comments and for the congratulations. Being a part of Poetry Soup has been such a wonderful experience, David
Date: 7/9/2020 2:59:00 PM
Lovely poem. Your work deserves much more recognition than it receives on here.
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/24/2020 5:20:00 AM
Your poem got the recognition it deserved in Craig's excellent contest. Congratulations David.
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David Holmes
Date: 7/10/2020 11:50:00 AM
Gary - WOW, thank you for such a wonderful comment - it is really appreciated. I look forward to reading some of your work over the weekend, David

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