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My Dream Within A Dream Poetry Contest
 
Sponsored by: Constance La France 
 
Written on 9 September 2025
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My Dream Within A Dream

You're not drunk if you can lie on the floor without holding on. Dean Martin 

My heart echoes a steady beat.
     I lie on a hard bed
     in perfect penumbra.
The soft sound seems to echo
from a plastic machine.
It beats steadily but slowly.
          A nurse comes in and, with a torch,
          examines the room thoroughly.

Suddenly, the heart beat stopped.
I lie in the dark on my bed,
consumed by fear. I feel stiff.
          No heart beats, no life, just pure fear.
I cannot rise from the bed.
Two men come in and drag a bed
out of the room. A nurse comes in.
     You will soon be fine—just a fall.
     Tomorrow you can go home.

Best drink some tea with cinnamon.
          You must have drunk a whole bottle!
     And get up from that sofa,
it's not for you, rest somewhere else.
Oh, a cop has a notice
          Seems you must go to court.
Don't ask where your bottle is.
Someone stole it and disappeared.

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La France Avatar
October 2, 2025 at 3:36 AM
Victor, congratulations on your win in my Dream Within A Dream contest, judged 09/29. Your poem is beautiful and I love the quote and image, Constance
Kendrick Avatar
September 30, 2025 at 11:26 AM
Congratulations on your work being on the winners' list. Way to go. I enjoyed reading this one today. Sara K
Goldsmith Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 8:57 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your powerful write. What A Picture... I guess "tea with cinnamon" is the best drink around. Have a fun day with your win as you go writing away..........
Rodrigues Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 6:01 AM
Back with congrats! Love the quote too…lol
Andresen Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 3:51 AM
- Back with a congratulation, Victor :) - hugs
Greenhough Avatar
September 13, 2025 at 10:24 AM
Lol, this is great. I never got drunk but I've seen some people who have. Your picture makes me sick to my stomach. This is one of the best drunk poems I've ever read. Good luck with the contest.
Roper Avatar
September 12, 2025 at 9:25 AM
Very well done, my friend. drinking and the police tell it all. Good luck.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 11, 2025 at 10:11 AM
Well done! Quite the storyteller!
Dietrich Avatar
September 10, 2025 at 2:24 PM
A cautionary tale on drinking. Great writing and I love that quote!
Fleming Avatar
September 10, 2025 at 12:58 PM
Powerful stuff, Victor ...powerful stuff indeed. Excellent writing! :) john
DiMino Avatar
September 10, 2025 at 8:51 AM
Drinking is not for everybody -- not at all for some. If one is going to kick back, and have a few -- and I mean a few! -- hide the car keys. And enjoy.
Williams Avatar
September 10, 2025 at 3:47 AM
Dearest Victor, a really powerful writing. I felt the tension build with the heartbeat and then shift into that surreal, almost dreamlike space. It flows like a vivid memory mixed with fear, yet still keeps you hooked right through to the end...Hugs
George Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 9:09 PM
I am sure it is a nightmare. It makes one scary. Once when we wake up, we feel so relieved thinking... that after all it has only been a dream. Great penning. All the Best.
Poet Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 1:06 PM
Having nightmares isn't always an enjoyable experience, dear Victor. This is an impressive work! Good luck in the contest!
Rose  Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 10:14 AM
drinking is never the answer it make grown people do stupid things, best drink tea I say, great poem Vic
Rolland Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 10:08 AM
sometimes dreams can be scary, it worked for me, this is well written, and quite original, enjoyed
Kendrick Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 7:59 AM
I think that would be a nightmare. LOL..Creative one for the contest. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
Andresen Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 2:04 AM
- An unpleasant experience, Victor :) - Great written :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - Have a nice day :) - hugs
Cunningham Avatar
September 9, 2025 at 1:02 AM
Lol, a night best forgotten Victor. Good luck in the contest. Tom
Sharma Avatar
September 8, 2025 at 11:28 PM
Hilarious turn of events!!!
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