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My Dream

eventide has come slowly creeping . . . I watched the sunset . . . the streaks of scarlet fall now, I lay upon my bed in twilight it is draped in purple lush silk with pillows plumb ~ my skin is pale and pearlescent in the candlelight a touch of rose glows upon my cheeks and lips my long wavy hair crimped and shiny ~ I close my heavy eyes and hear the thrum of a guitar it is throbbing in my head then, I hear the howling of some wild beast or is it a moaning ? . . . ~ and a strong taste is in the air a tang I cannot quite identify an aroma not quite unpleasant to my senses ~ I feel I am not alone there is a feral presence in my room oh, is it some fierce creature come to kill me ? some raging brutal thing . . . I can hardly breathe . . . I am so afraid then, I feel a gentle hand upon my hair stroking and a whisper in my ear of ' great need' . . . ~my heart is raging in my chest and I am breathless and filled with desire I hear my groaning murmur . . . who are you? ~ . . . I am your dream ! __________________________ March 31, 2021 Poetry/Free Verse/my dream Copyright Protected, ID 03-1343-047-31 All Rights Reserved, 2021, Constance La France Written for the Standard contest, Eight Word Bardenesque Challenge sponsor, John Hamilton, Judged 04/18/2021 Second Place

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Date: 4/18/2021 4:36:00 PM
This is excellent Constance, one of the best written in Greg's style. Would have been a top winner but you used plump instead of plumb, but congrats on a great 2nd place!
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Constance La France
Date: 4/20/2021 11:25:00 AM
John, thank you for the compliment and placement, although I made a blunder, I have corrected now. I admire Greg's style of writing so much and it was a delight to write this poem in his style, love _Constance
Date: 4/2/2021 1:56:00 AM
Brilliant use of the words, Constance, as close to Greg's writing as possible:) splendid work:)
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Date: 4/2/2021 6:26:00 AM
Jo, thanks so much for the compliment, I tried, but no one can ever be as good as Greg _Constance
Date: 4/1/2021 4:03:00 AM
This is one that has a touch of brilliance penned to it. I love love love it. Gorgeous writing. I love it. God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina
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Constance La France
Date: 4/1/2021 9:45:00 AM
Gina, thank you for the wonderful compliment, I loved writing this poem that is for sure, God bless _Constance
Date: 4/1/2021 3:56:00 AM
Nice one Constance, full of great imagery with fine expression too. Take care, Gordon
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Constance La France
Date: 4/1/2021 9:46:00 AM
Gordon, thank you for the compliment, I appreciate your visit so much, love _Constance
Date: 4/1/2021 12:08:00 AM
I love the mystery of this poem. The reader is required to write the missing lines. Is Constance dreaming is any ones guess. In this poem we get the colors i.e purple, scarlet, pale & rose colored cheeks. We get sound i.e. the thrum of a guitar (line 11). We feel the fear of the poet (barely able to breathe. Then a creepy howling. In the last line she cleverly turns the DREAM itself into a character in the poem. A beautiful mischievous dream and a well written poem for sure.. bravo
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Date: 4/1/2021 9:47:00 AM
Michael, thank you for the wonderful comment on my poem and for the compliment _Constance

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